Talk:Port Victoria Maritime Museum

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[HEADINGS throughout the text]

1) Page 2; paragraph 2 - Add a heading called: "Shipping"

2) Page 2; paragraph 3 - Add a heading called: "The Grain Stacks and the Loading of the Ships"

3) Page 2; paragraph 4 - Add a heading called: "Gustaf Erikson Connection"

4) Page 3; paragraph 6 - Add a heading called: "Cape Horners"

5) Page 3; paragraph 7 - Add a heading called: "Shipwrecks"


[ADD contents]

1) Page 2; paragraph 2 - At the end of the paragraph add: "The overseas sailing ships continued to load grain at Port Victoria until 1949."

2) Page 3; paragraph 7 - The text under the new 'Shipwreck' Heading needs more detail required. (I will submit further suggestions at a later date)



[LANGUAGE/TONE change]

1) Page 2; paragraph 3 - Delete first sentence starting in relation to: "The heart and soul of the town......" - Change the first sentence to: "Port Victoria was an important outlet for not only the district's grain, but also a shipping port for grain from many of the outports in Spencer Gulf."