Talk:Portal Stories: Mel

Latest comment: 1 month ago by Cukie Gherkin in topic GA Review

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Portal Stories: Mel/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: Vacant0 (talk · contribs) 18:54, 12 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Cukie Gherkin (talk · contribs) 05:58, 1 September 2024 (UTC)Reply


Infobox

  1. Should mention and source the engine
    I've removed it because it's not backed up by reliable sources.

Gameplay

  1. I'd recommend making a little clearer that Mel was a Valve concept reused for a fan work
      Done

Reception

  1. "Reviewers commended the game's voice acting and music. Hilliard and Hanson were unappealed by the voice acting." This feels a little off. Should tweak to avoid using "unappealed," and switch it so that the first line of this part of the reception here matches the introductory line of reviewers commending the voice acting and/or music.
  2. I'd consider tweaking the Reception section a bit to make it flow a little more smoothly, and maybe consider paraphrasing a little more. - Cukie Gherkin (talk) 20:20, 6 September 2024 (UTC)Reply
  Done I've tweaked the reception. Vacant0 (talkcontribs) 21:41, 6 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

Spotcheck

  1. [1] This looks good.
  2. [2] - Lookin' good
  3. [3] - Solid
  4. [4] - Wonderful

Hi @Cukie Gherkin:. When do you plan on continuing the review? I've also addressed all of your comments at Talk:Portal Revolution/GA1. Vacant0 (talkcontribs) 18:38, 6 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

All right, review done. Passed - Cukie Gherkin (talk) 18:59, 10 September 2024 (UTC)Reply