Talk:Powerless (Heroes)/GA1
Latest comment: 16 years ago by Cornucopia 2008 in topic GA Review
GA Review
edit- "It was written by co-executive producer Jeph Loeb and directed by executive producer Allan Arkush, and aired on 3 December 2007 as the conclusion of the "Volume 2: Generations" storyline" - try to avoid having more than one "and" in a sentence.
- "The episodes main storylines revolve around" - apostrophe for episode, and more than one storyline??
- "compound in Odessa in search of the virus." - context. What's the virus?
- "was originally conceived to be the conclusion of "Generations"" - what's generations?
- Ref 4 needs a publisher.
- "gave the episode an "A" grading, though he felt the episode" - a bit of repetition that could be fixed up
- "Stephen Lackey of Mania" - not sure this is the article you want
And please leave me a note when done. Cheers, giggy (:O) 00:09, 25 June 2008 (UTC)
- All raised points have been fixed. Corn.u.co.pia ♥ Disc.us.sion 08:16, 25 June 2008 (UTC)