Talk:Presence (album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 16:38, 24 December 2018 (UTC)

Infobox

• Released: 18 June 1976 (US) → source?

Where does it say that? It was April.

 Done

Lead

• Add the single release.

I'd rather not, as Zep were very well-known for not being a single band

Nevertheless, it is a single released from the album. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:20, 13 January 2019 (UTC)

• Something regarding the artwork as it is mentioned several times in the article.

Done

Background

• Physical Graffiti → date in between brackets
• intending to start a major US tour on 23 August → year?
• throughout October. → year?

Copyedited to make clearer — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ritchie333 (talk • contribs) 20:03, 13 January 2019 (UTC)

 Done

Recording

• with longtime group associate Keith Harwood engineering → he is the engineer right? This is poorly worded.

Tweaked. Harwood did the button pushing and knob twiddling, but Page called all the shots in the studio.

• Black and Blue. → year?

The recording was 1975, but can't that be inferred from the rest of the prose?

I meant the year of release, which is 1976. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:25, 13 January 2019 (UTC)

• about Page and manager Peter Grant about booking → about Page and manager Peter Grant booking. Avoid repetition of vocabulary.

Done

Songs

• the remaining song → you can say its name

Done Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 19:14, 12 January 2019 (UTC)

• It was the only track on the album credited to the entire band → we already know that from above

I think it's worth mentioning it again here, though

 Done

Packaging and artwork

• Fine

Release and reception

• In Britain it attained one of the highest ever advance orders, shipping gold on the day of release. → source?

Lewis 1990 p.57, as stated

• No. 1 on the US Billboard Pop Albums chart and entered at No. 24 on the Cashbox Top 100 Albums, before rising to No. 1 the following week → not on the charts

I don't think I added that. Not in source given, removed

• I believe it is relevant the peak positions in Japan, Norwegian, France, and Australia since they are all top five.

I think with similar articles we only logged the peak markets of the UK and the US, unless you were thinking of a summary here? Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 17:21, 15 January 2019 (UTC)

• Candy Store Rock" was released as a single in the US, but it failed to chart → release date is in said source? If so add it here as well.

No, the source is just a list of US released singles with (1976) as the only information given

• received lukewarm reviews upon its release → not on source give.

Trimmed

2015 reissue

• and as high resolution 96k/24-bit digital downloads. → not sourced, on top of this it is high quality for sure, so this information doesn't seem relevant.

I didn't write this bit, trimmed anyhow

 Done

Track listing

• Use the sleeve notes for backing up the track list.

 Done

Personnel

• Fine

Weekly charts

• Australian Kent Music Report Albums Chart → missing source

Had a look online and couldn't find anything beyond Wikipedia mirrors, so removed. If somebody finds a source, it can always be put back. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ritchie333 (talk • contribs) 21:13, 13 January 2019 (UTC)

 Done

Certifications

• Fine

References

• Reference 31 has no URL either find it or remove the URL since its Q magazine.

Removed, I don't think it's vitally important that we only have 7 reviews compared to 8 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ritchie333 (talk • contribs) 21:15, 13 January 2019 (UTC)

I found it. 1 MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:39, 13 January 2019 (UTC)

• Entertainment Weekly has connection issues, see the URL as it is different.

Can't find it - so removed. I don't think it's vitally important to have so many reviews. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 17:24, 15 January 2019 (UTC)

• PROMUSICAE source is dead, use Hung Medien.

Sorry, where is that source? Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 21:55, 13 January 2019 (UTC)

Automatic sources. See here: 1 and then here, there are a lot more charts the album made it, 2 Add it and then add to the commercial performance section. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 00:38, 14 January 2019 (UTC)

Sorry, I haven't a clue how to do that :-( Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 17:24, 15 January 2019 (UTC)

I did a couple. They are most from 2015 so only add them to that collum. Do the same for the rest, just change country and peak position. Let the first collum be the way it is. So add new countries that never charted before and older that charted either with higher peaks or lower ones. Check the date by clinking in each country seeing if the peak week is in 2015. I believe it is. Good luck! MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:54, 15 January 2019 (UTC)

External links

• Fine

Overall

• A very well-rounded article. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 16:38, 24 December 2018 (UTC)

Quick holding reply, sorry I've been away over Christmas / New Year so won't be able to get round to sorting this out until next week. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 20:55, 5 January 2019 (UTC)

@Ritchie333: fine dude. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:00, 9 January 2019 (UTC)

I'll hopefully get the remainder of the issues sorted tomorrow. Sorry about the rather glacial pace of this. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 21:56, 13 January 2019 (UTC)

@Ritchie333: You should add two reviews to the boxscore and also added them and others if possible to the prose. At least don't let the box go into another section if there is more material to add. You can change the English I used to one that pleases you more. In the meantime I will change the charts section, and you should consider split the commercial performance from the critical reception. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:38, 15 January 2019 (UTC)

@Ritchie333: Up for this?

Oh crikey, I'd forgotten about this review. Ummm, okay : "you should add two reviews to the boxscore" - what reviews? Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 13:33, 4 February 2019 (UTC)

You can either add Past Magazine, Pop Matters, Mojo (I would avoid his one), The Quietus, Classic Rock Magazine, Uncut... pick your poison. On top of that do the charts thing I asked you for. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:00, 4 February 2019 (UTC)

I'm failing this review as I don't understand what any remaining issues are in the article. You've lost me. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 16:16, 16 February 2019 (UTC)

@Ritchie333:

• Add two more reviews that are on the metacritic website.
• Add the charts positions of 2016 when the album re-entered several charts, you could see what I have done. I did the table and added some positions you just had to o the rest.

That was it, another problem here and there that I would fix. I don't get what you don't understand. I replied to you and explained everything above. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 16:43, 16 February 2019 (UTC)