Talk:Pretty Princess Party/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:58, 20 December 2020 (UTC)

Can't say pretty princess parties are my cup of tea... but I'll review it. ♦ jaguar 21:58, 20 December 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• "and six different minigames" - perhaps link minigame
  • Done
• "The game saw generally positive reviews, who liked its accessibility for child players" - no pronoun agreement here. Try something like The game saw generally positive reviews; critics lauded its accessibility for child players...
  • Oops, you're right. I've borrowed your wording.
• "The game was originally released by Nippon Columbia in Japan on December 5, 2019, and later by Aksys Games internationally on December 3, 2020." - I would usually put the release dates at the beginning of the lead but since this is a short article I can see why it's here
  • Mhm.
• The lead summarises the article per WP:LEAD, accounting for its shortness

Gameplay

• "based on tablets indicating in what manner a room should be furnished" - is this referring to tablet computer or something like a clay tablet?
  • Linked clay tablets - this is a fairy-tale fantasy setting with no advanced technology

Reception

• Famitsu should be linked in the first instance it appears
  • You're right - this is the type of thing that I easily overlook while reorganizing paragraphs
• " and the fluffy dresses and accessories like a dream for young players" - I have a feeling "like a dream" should be in quotations
  • Agreed, and done.

I understand this article may be as comprehensive as it can be, owing to its small Japanese release. The sources also check out. I'll leave this  On hold until the above are clarified. Good work on this one. ♦ jaguar 22:17, 20 December 2020 (UTC)

@Jaguar: I believe I have addressed everything. And yep - I didn't even intend to bring this to GA (I'm not really the target audience for this kind of game, hah...), I just improved it while looking for sources during its recent AfD, and then realized that it was already covering everything. Btw, if you have any GANs/FACs/FLCs/PRs/etc that you're waiting for reviews on, I'll do one in return (alternatively I'll owe you one for when you do).--Alexandra^IDV 22:43, 20 December 2020 (UTC)

Thanks Alexandra. With all that out of the way I'll be happy to see this promoted. It's been a while hasn't it! Don't worry about it, though I plan to nominate PlayStation (console) at FAC one day. ♦ jaguar 11:08, 21 December 2020 (UTC)

Thank you! Hit me up when it's ready and I'll be there~!--Alexandra^IDV 11:16, 21 December 2020 (UTC)