Talk:Prince Bernhard's titi monkey/GA1
Latest comment: 1 year ago by Etriusus in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Etriusus (talk · contribs) 02:36, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
Lets get this reviewed.
Copy-vios
editIt is estimated that it will lose 44.5% of its current range over the next 24 years (three generations).
A bit too close to the original, bordering on close-paraphrasing.- I mixed it up a little. It should be better now.
Images
edit- Rights are in order
- I found [1] on the commons if you want to add it.
- Done
Sources
edit- I managed to find [2], its an excerpt from the Associated Press. It has a bit of interesting info but nothing groundbreaking. I tried to find the original, no such luck.
- Added a little.
- This source describes the discovery in closer detail [3].
- Not much new, but again, I added a little.
- Noticing a lot of sources citing the same papers, I get what you mean by this is the majority of info.
Prose
edit- would recommend collapsing Etymology and Taxonomy.
- Done
- I see in FN 1 that the species was discovered in 1998. This article says 2002. Thoughts?
- Where does it say that? I looked through that and a few other sources and the only date I have seen is 2002.
The specimen apparently died from natural causes and was collected by M. G. M. van Roosmalen in November 1998.
Correction, it was FN 2.- Well, 2002 was when it was first described, but I added a mention of this as well.
- There are a few details that could be added from FN 1 but I won't quibble over relatively minor bits of info. The differences between it and closely related species would be nice to add.
- I included some of these details.
- Thermoregulation can be expanded and should be reworded for a more encyclopedic tone. Source goes very in depth.
- I improved the tone and added some detail, although I didn't want to risk WP:INDISCRIMINATE by going too in-depth. It should be sufficient the way it currently is.
That's really all I could find. The page is very well written overall and a few expansions/clarifications are needed. I made some minor clarifications, feel free to double check my edits. On Hold. Etrius ( Us) 02:36, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- How does it look now? An anonymous username, not my real name 04:28, 1 December 2022 (UTC)
- Excellent work!! I gave the page a second pass and there are no major issues relevant to GA criteria. Page passes. Congrats!!! Etrius ( Us) 13:49, 1 December 2022 (UTC)
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