Talk:Project Survival

This is an interesting article, the content seems to be neutral and detailed!

1. I think adding a contents page would be helpful for the lead section and in giving the article some intro and more structure, e.g. origins, history, etc. Having headings and dividing up the article into smaller sections would be nice.
2. Also check for minor spelling mistakes near the bottom, "his day" seems to be referring to "this day" but it was quoted so I didn't correct it yet.
3. Try to cite the source for the image.

- Eclair08 (talk) 19:06, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

The article does well in providing an unbiased account, using a quote to display a certain viewpoint rather than saying the viewpoint on its own. Saying that project survival is not an Earth Day event itself is an important and well made distinction. Good details and ensuing links on each of the speakers.

The sentence "The hallways were jammed with thousands of attendants to the event" seems unnecessary and redundant with the following sentence. When referring to time, one to 6 am, the number parts should be the same format, one to six am or 1 to 6 am. 19:34, 28 October 2016 (UTC)Fredfreddelgado (talk)Fredfreddelgado

This is a really interesting article and the information is presented in a clear and neutral way. I was able to learn a lot! I especially think the opening paragraph is great because it provides a thorough description of Project Survival.

1. It might be helpful to provide a brief description of Earth Day and Earth Day events, for readers who may not know what the day entails.
2. You can also break the article into sections- maybe a section on history and a section on the people who are involved.
3. I made a small copy-edit on the time (as discussed above) by changing one to 1 p.m.

Jgraifman (talk) 04:09, 4 November 2016 (UTC)jgraifman

Info is pretty neutral and provides a good overview. However creating smaller sections such as 'impact' and 'topics of discussion' may make it easier to follow. I like that you've mentioned some of the speakers but they seem detached from the topics, what in particular were they discussing and what was the aim of their discussion? The section on where 30 people took the stage is unclear and doesn't seem to have a build in, it might be better suited if the topics and time of the event were placed before that. If the event did occur from midnight to 6 a.m. it might be pertinent to place some emphasis on that/list it a little earlier in the article (since it's an unusual time for such a large event).

The build in and initial explanation are great and help to clarify what the purpose of project survival was and how it linked to Earth Day. - Zaayer Zamerch (talk) 05:21, 4 November 2016 (UTC)