Talk:Psychedelic music/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Sabrebd in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ritchie333 (talk · contribs) 11:25, 5 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

I'll give this a go. I'll spend the next day or two reading through the article and its references thoroughly, and list comments as i go.

General

  • No disambig links and no dead URLs

Lead

  • The punctuation on the first sentence looks a bit confusing. Do you mean to say "Psychedelic music (sometimes known as psychedelia, derived from etc)?
  Done The etymology was unnecessary anyway.--SabreBD (talk) 21:39, 11 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • I'll come back to the rest of the lead later

Characteristics

  • Is there a specific reason why the information in this section is a list and not prose?
  Done Not really. I changed it to prose.--SabreBD (talk) 21:39, 11 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "and they profoundly influenced the thinking of the new generation of youth". I'd prefer to attribute this to a particular author. While we might look back and think the 60s was a time of revolutionary new thinking, outside of Haight-Ashbury and Swinging London it wasn't really at all.... I mean look how much commercial success Ken Dodd had in the 60s!
  Done I attributed it, which hopefully makes the conditionality clearer. Any references to hippies, particularly in the UK should point out the relatively small numbers and limited class base, but I we are prisoners of our sources. Even so I think Ken Dodd had a different demographic.--SabreBD (talk) 21:57, 11 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Psychedelic folk

  • I think the picture of Donovan would sit better than one of the Grateful Dead - for all his pop / rock crossover success, he started out as basically Dylan-influenced folk artist (as indeed the relevant paragraph states)
  Done--SabreBD (talk) 21:57, 11 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "backward tapes" - should this read "backwards tapes"?
  Done--SabreBD (talk) 21:57, 11 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Might be worth mentioning the specific instruments that John Fahey used - the Allmusic source mentions flute and sitar
  Done--SabreBD (talk) 21:57, 11 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Psychedelic rock

  Done--SabreBD (talk) 20:04, 15 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Is psychedelicsight.com a reliable source? The citation is also tagged with "clarification needed"
  Done No I don't think it is.--SabreBD (talk) 21:57, 11 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • I don't think Traffic were really part of the UK underground. They formed after Pink Floyd and Soft Machine and spent the early part of their career holed up in a cottage in Berkshire. Tomorrow might be a better choice here, though not as commercially successful, they were part of the underground scene and spawned Keith West and Steve Howe.
  • "The same year saw the débuts" ... what is "débuts" referring to here exactly?
  Done Albums.--SabreBD (talk) 22:45, 12 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • I'm pretty sure the picture of Steve Winwood is not from 1969 - his hair looks nothing like the footage for Blind Faith's gig that June, and I don't think Traffic gigged at all that year.
  Done I think you are right, the 1969 tag was inherited, so I removed it.
  • "apogee" seems a bit unnecessary - why not just say "peak"?
  Done--SabreBD (talk) 20:04, 15 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Regarding the Beatles' releases, "definitive" and "controversial" are loaded terms? Definitive and controversial according to whom?
  Done the source, but I removed them.--SabreBD (talk) 22:45, 12 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Worth mentioning that not only was Their Satanic Majesties Request overly psychedelic, it was the only time the Stones ever went near this sort of style
  Done--SabreBD (talk) 22:45, 12 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "Pink Floyd produced what is usually seen as their best psychedelic work" - "usually seen" to whom?
  Done I believe this was in the source, but I removed it anyway.--SabreBD (talk) 22:45, 12 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  Done--SabreBD (talk) 22:45, 12 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • I'm not sure The Who were ever psychedelic. Several sources stated that Keith Moon in particularly hated hippies.
I can see for miles, was one of their few forays - as the source indicates.--SabreBD (talk) 22:45, 12 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • In terms of development from straightforward R&B to psychedelia, the Small Faces are worth mentioning - phasing on Itchycoo Park, blatant drug references on Here Come The Nice, Ogden's Nut Gone Flake.
No argument on the overall significance of the Faces, but they were a little late as pioneers and this part is a summary of Psychedelic rock. I added a bit more about them there, but it complicates the chronology a bit here. Unless you insist I would rather leave them out of this summary.--SabreBD (talk) 21:15, 15 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Psychedelic pop

  • The Barrett era Floyd fits more into psychedelic pop, at least partially through their recorded output
  Done--SabreBD (talk) 21:59, 15 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Decline

  • "and their deaths were closely followed that of" doesn't seem to make gramattical sense
  Done--SabreBD (talk) 22:45, 12 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • I'm not sure if Abbey Road is best described as a "raw style"
  Done--SabreBD (talk) 22:45, 12 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Might be worth mentioning Kevin Ayers in the list of "psychedelic-influenced and whimsical strand of British folk"?
  Done--SabreBD (talk) 09:11, 16 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

More later... Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 11:25, 5 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Influence

  Done--SabreBD (talk) 22:45, 12 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Are Popol Vuh really that influential in synth development?
  Done I dont think so. The wider Krautrock bands were probably more significant and are a more obvious link with the psychedelic.--SabreBD (talk) 08:53, 16 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • The Allmusic source cited stated that psychedelic influences played a part in creating bubblegum pop, but all the source says is comparing Sagittarius as being "not as bubblegum" as The Lemon Pipers
  Done--SabreBD (talk) 22:35, 15 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Neo-psychedelia

  • I wonder if it's worth giving Julian Cope a bit more of a mention here, as outside the Teardrop Explodes he's kept the psychedelic flag flying with his solo work - of which the cover of Fried is a great example
  Done--SabreBD (talk) 15:58, 16 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Psychedelic electronic music

  • The lead part of this section is only one sentence. To use appropriate summary style, you probably want to grab a bit more from Rave music to pass GA status
  Done I deleted that bit. There is no requirement to have a section lead and it wasn't really adding much.--SabreBD (talk) 18:08, 16 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • I think there can be a case for adding something about psychedelic hip-hop, such as 3 Feet High and Rising ("Transmitting Live from Mars" sounds pretty psychedelic to me)
  Done Although I may have to come back to this if I find more sources, at least the basics are here.--SabreBD (talk) 19:44, 15 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Audio

  Done--SabreBD (talk) 15:58, 16 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Stability

  • OnBeyondZebrax (talk · contribs) has made a substantial contribution to this article, and you reverted him a few times. I don't think there's any long term stability issues, but I'm interested to know what was going on here?
Only two reverts I think and one of them was partial. Mainly formatting issues and some unsourced statements. Nothing really major.--SabreBD (talk) 18:08, 16 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Well, I think that's it. No real major show-stopping issues, so I'm putting this on hold for now. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 11:07, 8 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

I think that is all the issues addressed. Over to you.--SabreBD (talk) 18:08, 16 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
Just a quick note - I haven't forgotten about this, but my time on WP has been a bit limited this week - I'm looking at closing this down in the next couple of days. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 06:35, 21 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
Sorry for any delay, but I think all the issues are accounted for, so it's a pass. Well done. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 15:45, 28 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
Many thanks for all the effort.--SabreBD (talk) 16:26, 28 August 2013 (UTC)Reply