Talk:Pyramids (song)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Pyramids (song)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Teman13 (talk · contribs) 19:28, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

I love Frank Ocean, so I'll happily be reviewing this article! teman13 ^{TALKCONTRIBUTIONS} 19:28, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

Is this song a single or just a song, because if it is a single then it automatically fails WP:SINGLE due to the fact that the article doesn't give a release history. teman13 ^{TALKCONTRIBUTIONS} 22:25, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

Lead

• American and singer-songwriter needs to be unlinked, never underestimate the intelligence of our readers.
• The soundcloud sentance needs to be removed because it really isn't relevant and is WP:Fancruft.
• The music video was directed by Nabil Elderkin and featured an orange car with an atmospheric background, with the song playing over it. Again don't underestimate the intelligence of our readers, I'm quite sure they know that songs play during music videos, that part needs to be removed.

Background

• On June 8, 2012, Ocean posted onto his tumblr a "cryptic" nearly two-minute video, promoting an unknown project which was titled Channel Orange.The clip mostly just "lingers lovingly over an expensive-looking car", which also contained new music. The song was a "lushly produced, drifting slow jam that Ocean’s probably made 50 or so times by now." Later that day Ocean posted the full song used in the video, titled "Pyramids" onto his Soundcloud account.

This is very confusing. You need to summerize this better, explain that the video was a trailer for Channel Orange and remove the lushly produced, drifting slow jam that Ocean’s probably made 50 or so times by now. as that makes things even more confusing.

• The song was Ocean's first new single in over a year, which was described as him coming "back into the spotlight in a huge way." The track was labeled indicating that it was to be the ninth track on the album. It was later announced that the Channel Orange project was actually his debut album and that he would launch his corresponding tour. The release of the album's tracklist confirmed both the track placement of the track and the appearance of it on the album.Minsker, Evan (2012-06-23). "Frank Ocean Reveals Album Art, Tracklist". Pitchfork Media. Retrieved 2010-10-26. The following day Ocean posted "playing ‘Pyramids’ on the road is gonna be my favourite part" on his Twitter account, speaking about his promotional tour.

First of all there seems to be a reference that hasn't been formatted correctly. secondly I understand that you are trying to have a good Prose, but sentences like The track was labeled indicating that it was to be the ninth track on the album. is not only irrelavant to the SONG, but is very confusing as you could have simply said, The track was the ninth song on the album's tracklist. That needs and to be removed. and so does the release of the album's tracklist confirmed both the track placement of the track and the appearance of it on the album.

Verdict

I would normally try to continue, but after skimming the article, it has a lot of problems mainly Wikipedia:QUOTE, your using quotes improperly and way too much. There's also a lot of unnecessary material. I would suggest a peer review or a copy edit before you try at another review. teman13 ^{TALKCONTRIBUTIONS} 23:20, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

Just fail the article then. Bruce Campbell (talk) 23:24, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

If you would like I'll put the article on hold for one week and you can fix stuff up and I'll be happy to review it again. teman13 ^{TALKCONTRIBUTIONS} 23:26, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Pyramids (song)/GA2. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Rp0211 (talk · contribs) 22:34, 14 July 2012 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose):
   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references):
   b (citations to reliable sources):
   c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects):
   b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Infobox

• Nothing in article to support that the song was released as a digital download

Added reference.

• Information in article needed to support the information about the song's genre, record label, writers, and producers

Added references for all.

Lead

• On June 7 of 2012, Ocean posted a small teaser video... → Change "June 7 of 2012" to "June 7, 2012" for better prose
• Ocean performed "Pyramids" during his 14 show Channel Orange tour through North America. → Not sure if "14 show" is necessary

Both done

Background

• No issues

Composition

• No issues

Reception

• No issues

Promotion

• No issues

Chart

• No issues

References

• No issues

After thoroughly reviewing this article, I have decided to put it on hold at this time. I will give you the general seven days to fix these mistakes and/or address issues which you believe do not affect good article status. If you have any questions, please feel free to ask. Rp0211 ^(talk2me) 23:12, 14 July 2012 (UTC)

I believe I have addressed the complaints. Bruce Campbell (talk) 00:30, 15 July 2012 (UTC)

Since all issues have been addressed, I feel confident passing this article. Congratulations and keep up the good work! Rp0211 ^(talk2me) 04:59, 15 July 2012 (UTC)

Edit Request - Music Video

please add a reference to the music video for this song (http://thelavalizard.com/2012/09/new-video-frank-ocean-pyramids/) to this article--mikomango mwa! 03:26, 17 September 2012 (UTC)