Talk:Randy Ambrosie/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 10:04, 12 November 2017 (UTC)

It's me again! Taking on this review. MWright96 (talk) 15:22, 12 November 2017 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Infobox

• Multiple facts in the infobox are unsourced, like the DOB, POB, height, and weight

I think these come from the The Canadian Pro Football Encyclopedia, @BU Rob13: WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 21:44, 16 November 2017 (UTC)

Yes, the entire infobox in all of my Canadian football biographies are sourced to the CPFE. ~ Rob₁₃^Talk 22:06, 16 November 2017 (UTC)

Early career

• "In 1984, he was named an All-Canadian." - maybe you could explain what an All-Canadian is to non-football experts like myself  Done
• "By February 1985, he was considered likely to be selected in the first round of the 1985 CFL Draft." - if there anything to say whom Ambrosie was likely to be selected for the first round of the 85 draft?  Done

Calgary Stampeders

• Wikilink Calgary Stampeders since it is the first time it is mentioned in the main body of the prose  Done
• I'm guessing that rookie of the year is the CFL's Most Outstanding Rookie Award? If so please added a wikilink  Done

Toronto Argonauts

• Added a wikilink to Toronto Argonauts and right guard  Done
• "The continued injury issues didn't affect the offensive line's success on the field," - no contractions please  Done

Edmonton Eskimos

• "The Argonauts had not originally planned to trade Ambrosie, but Ambrosie requested to be traded to a team closer to where his wife worked." - reptition of Ambrosie  Done
• "The Eskimos met the Stampeders in the West Final for the fourth season in the row" - reword to The Eskimos met the Stapeders in the West Final for the fourth consecutive season  Done

Adminstrative roles

• "On June 29, 2017, Ambrosie was named to be the 14th CFL commissioner, succeeding Jeffrey Orridge." - should be reworded toOn June 29, 2017 Ambrosie was name the 14th CFL commissioner, succeeding Jeffrey Orridge.  Done
• "The move was made official on July 4." - perhaphs this could be reworded to say The move was made offical five days later.  Done

I slightly changed this section of the article. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 23:10, 16 November 2017 (UTC)

The change looks fine and thanks for correcting a factual error that I overlooked. MWright96 (talk) 11:14, 17 November 2017 (UTC)

References

• References 39, 40 and 46 are bare urls  Done

Going to place this review on hold until everything has been dealt with. MWright96 (talk) 15:22, 12 November 2017 (UTC)

I'm helping Rob with his reviews, so I'll get to this if he doesn't. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 10:43, 16 November 2017 (UTC)

@WikiOriginal-9: Thank you for taking on the review for Rob. Am more than happy to make this article a GA. MWright96 (talk) 11:14, 17 November 2017 (UTC)