Talk:Ray Reardon/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 21:18, 2 August 2021 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Prose

Lede

• winning six World Championships, - winning the World Snooker Championship on six occasions. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:57, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
• 1978, and runner-up in the 1982 World Championship. - 1982 event. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:57, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
• I think the lede should mention his highest break. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:57, 4 August 2021 (UTC)

General

• link cue sports Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:09, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
• uthors Luke Williams and Paul Gadsby (2005) claim - do we need the year? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:09, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
• snooker. [2] - spacing issue. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:09, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
• British Junior (under 19) - probably doesn't need to be in brackets. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:09, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
• in a succession of money matches as well as facing his several times in amateur tournaments - something is wrong here. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:09, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
• Worth mentioning what he did between '57 and '64? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:09, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
• was in 1969, - pipes to a redirect. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:09, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
• He lost his first match at the 1972 World Snooker Championship, 22–25 to Rex Williams in the quarter-finals.[24] He reached - feels a bit WP:PROSELINEy to me. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:09, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
• In January 1976, Reardon appeared on This is Your Life, with guests including Spencer, Charlton, Higgins, Pulman, Miles, Jackie Rea, Cliff Thorburn and Joyce Gardner. - could probably go in the legacy section> Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:09, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
• Reardon won his fifth world title at the 1976 World Snooker Championship, defeating John Dunning 15–7, Dennis Taylor 15–2 and Perrie Mans 20–10. During the final, Reardon complained about the television lighting, which was changed, the quality of the table, to which adjustments were subsequently made, and the referee, who was replaced. Higgins - need to state he played Higgins in the final earlier. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:09, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
• 1991 World Championship - link Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:09, 4 August 2021 (UTC)

Review meta comments

• I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:18, 2 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review, Lee Vilenski. I've amended the article in line with your comments. Also added the Park Drive 600 to the list of non-ranking wins. I couldn't find very much on about 1957 to 1964, but I added a few words about him choosing to work on his game, as his non-snooker career is already referred to. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:59, 8 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Yeah, that's cool. Just wanted something to explain that he wasn't playing. Promoting Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:01, 8 August 2021 (UTC)