Talk:Raymond Howard (Wiccan)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:47, 24 August 2016 (UTC)

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 18:47, 24 August 2016 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Biography

• "This was up the road from Dumbledene," - up the road sounds informal
  • Changed to "located near to". Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:13, 25 August 2016 (UTC)

• "and they had placed an advert" - advertisement
  • Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:13, 25 August 2016 (UTC)

The Coven of Atho

• "and taught "Eight Paths of Magick", which was similar to the Eightfold Path taught in Gardnerian Wicca." - reptition of "taught"
  • Changed first "taught" to "promulgated". Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:11, 25 August 2016 (UTC)

• "the racer Donald Campbell" - clarify what sort of racer Campbell was
  • Replaced with "race car driver". Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:11, 25 August 2016 (UTC)

• remove the hyphen from cash-box
  • Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:11, 25 August 2016 (UTC)

References

• no dead links

Overall a good read. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 20:16, 24 August 2016 (UTC)

Many thanks for the review, MWright96! Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:13, 25 August 2016 (UTC)

Midnightblueowl Thanks. I agree with the suggestions you have raised. Promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 11:31, 25 August 2016 (UTC)