Talk:Re:Zero/GA1

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Reviewer: ISD (talk · contribs) 09:09, 23 April 2017 (UTC)Reply


I've spotted the following things that are worth looking over:

  • In the plot section, some of the characters are introduced with no explanation of who they are. For example: ""Satella" mentions that her insignia was stolen by Felt." Who is Felt? Also: "While recovering at Roswaal's mansion...", who is Roswall? Also: "Later, Emilia is summoned to the capital by Wilhelm and Felix." Who are Wilhelm and Felix?
  • In the first paragraph of the plot section there is the sentence, "He learns that the name 'Satella' actually refers to the Jealous Witch, and is considered a taboo." Here you put the name "Satella" in single quotation marks whereas in the rest of the article it is in double quotation marks. Best to stick with one or the other.
  • Remember to follow the rules of punctuation when quoting someone, even if it is just a one word quote. As a Brit I'm not an expert on American English, but this seems to be a useful guide. For example, remember the use of commas before a quote.
  • In the sentence: 'Rem and Ram also underwent significant changes from the first draft: their original designs lacked the characteristic hair parts, and their maid uniforms were longer and more "traditional".', remove the links, as Rem and Ram have already been linked in the plot section. One link for each character when you first mention them is OK.
  • Not required, but you may want to consider making articles for Death's Organ and Sugoi Japan awards to get rid of the redlinks. It can just be a stub, but it will make the article look better. As stated, not a requirement, but it might be something to consider in the long run, especially if you plan to nominate the article for FA status in the future.

Hope this is all clear. ISD (talk) 09:09, 23 April 2017 (UTC)Reply

@ISD: All   Done, except for the red links while I'll keep in case someone wants to write articles about them. By the way, I just checked the Manual of Style, and it seems that in the cases in the article, the punctuations marks should be outside the quotation marks, not the inside. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 10:06, 23 April 2017 (UTC)Reply
@Narutolovehinata5: I'm bow down to your superior knowledge of punctuation. Every that needs to be covered has been, so I'm promoting the article to GA. ISD (talk) 17:21, 23 April 2017 (UTC)Reply