Talk:Red Dead Redemption 2/GA1

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Reviewer: Leonidas1206 (talk · contribs) 16:48, 30 October 2019 (UTC)

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• I think the sentence "The player can only get remove their bounty by paying it off at a post office" may be wrong. 'Get' should be removed and 'their' removed by 'his'. Leonidas1206 (talk) 16:57, 30 October 2019 (UTC)

• In the paragraph Characters, the Braitwathes are mentioned two times. I know this is not wrong, but I would suggest another formulation. Leonidas1206 (talk) 17:01, 30 October 2019 (UTC)

• Also in that paragraph, Rains Fall and Eagle Flies are mentioned, but I think you should add that they become some sort of allies of Dutch's gang too. Leonidas1206 (talk) 17:04, 30 October 2019 (UTC)

• Rhodes is never mentioned in the article, even though it is a pretty important town in the storyline. Leonidas1206 (talk) 17:06, 30 October 2019 (UTC)

Thanks, Leonidas1206! I've made some changes based on these suggestions so far. – Rhain ☔ 00:59, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

• Is it known who these 400 other people were? "When Rockstar Games realized that a group of distinct studios would not necessarily work, it co-opted all of its studios into one large team to facilitate development between 1,600 people; a total of around 2,000 people worked on the game." Leonidas1206 (talk) 10:37, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

I wish I could say for sure; the interview says that "2,000 people worked on the game, 1,600 of which were developers". I assume the other 400 were either non-employees of Rockstar (such as musicians and outsourced staff) or people who didn't necessarily "develop" the game (such as marketing and PR), but I can't say for sure. – Rhain ☔ 10:41, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

OK. Leonidas1206 (talk) 10:53, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

• Would it be possible to use some more pictures in the article? I would certainly use a picture of dead eye, or perhaps some pictures of a town/city or character. Leonidas1206 (talk) 10:55, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

The article already features three non-free images, which is probably starting to push it. An image of a town/city or character isn't an entirely necessary visual component, but I think a short video or GIF of the Dead Eye system may be possible with an effective rationale; it would be a beneficial accompaniment to the text, which is unable to truly explain how the system works without a visual component. Let me know your thoughts. – Rhain ☔ 11:08, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

I think the dead eye is the only one that (in my opinion) is really important. The other ones aren't really necessary. Leonidas1206 (talk) 11:19, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

@Leonidas1206: How's this? – Rhain ☔ 12:02, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

That's exactly what I meant. Perfect! Leonidas1206 (talk) 15:19, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

• Non-reviewer comment: I feel like the companion app ("RDR2: Companion"), which released alongside the game for Android and iOS, should be mentioned in some capacity.[1][2][3][4] Lordtobi (✉) 12:43, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

@Lordtobi: Good point! I somehow totally forgot about the app, even though I've had it downloaded since launch. I've added a mention to the article (and the Development article). – Rhain ☔ 12:52, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

Overall As a great fan of the game, I'm very happy to announce that the article Red Dead Redemption 2 has passed the good article criteria. The article is very complete and interesting, and I have nothing to complain about, nor about language, nor about style. Congratulations! Leonidas1206 (talk) 12:16, 1 November 2019 (UTC)