Talk:Regine at the Theater/GA1

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Grk1011 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Grk1011 (talk · contribs) 15:47, 25 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

I will be reviewing this for you! Grk1011 (talk) 15:47, 25 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Comments as outlined below. Table updated as issues are addressed.
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (inline citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Infobox and lead

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  • Infobox is good overall, including non-free rationale for the image.
  • For the two instances of "November 27", did you mean November 21? That's what the poster and shows table list for the last show.
That's my bad, it is Nov 21. Fixed
  • Add "Philippines" after Parañaque.
Added
  • The lead could use a slight rewrite for flow. There are at least two short sentences that stand out due to the length of the other sentences surrounding them.
Revised.

Background and development

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  • Change to "would perform" and "that November"
Done
  • Ref 1 is an article on the GMA website about her announcing the shows through the social media posts, but I don't see how that also translates to her announcing it through GMA Network News. Aren't they just reporting the news?
Revised
  • fix ", with a show title called Regine at the Theater."
Not sure what you meant to fix on this, but if it's adding Philippines after Paranaque, I've done so too.
  • Add something to introduce PLDT like "telecommunications company PLDT"
Added
  • Ref 2 from PLDT has some interesting promotional aspects of the partnership which aren't mentioned
I don't think it'll add value to include giving away free or complimentary tickets or etc, from sponsors. Concert/Tours generally do not incorporate such.
  • "songs she will perform" -> change "will" to would.
Done
  • "...production, while Audie Gemora,..." would it make sense to add singers or performers after "while"?
Done
  • Ref 9. Could you elaborate on this a bit? I'm not sure that mentioning it aired with an unverifiable ref like this would work. There is likely some article or at least a specific date out there.
Unfortunately, sourcing or citations within the Philippines are a bit of a challenge, even for recent ones. I've made this approach to another GA of her concert (Twenty (concert) as well.
  • I couldn't find the "two years earlier" in refs 4 or 5.
It's mentioned in ref 5: This concert series (which was conceptualized two years ago)
  • Quote checks out. Clever way of using it while avoiding the Tagalog that was sprinkled into the original.

Synopsis and reception

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  • change to a piano?
Done
  • "alternately mashed" <- I'm not sure what this means
I've linked to Mashup (music) to provide context
  • Change "the next act" to "the second act". I'd also recommend opening this section with the fact that it was a two act show. You mention it in the lead, but don't say that elsewhere.
Done
  • Bunoan quote checks out in ref 10
  • What about the special guests? When did they perform?
Gemora appeared in all shows, Santos and Viray alternated in both weekends. Added note in the "Shows" section

Set list

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  • If the set list varied a little bit, I think that needs to be mentioned in the synopsis as well.
Added

Shows

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  • All good here

Other GA criteria

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  • Images good
  • Ref spot checks listed above
  • Earwigs copyvio at 37% (unlikely vio), but it just flagged properly-attributed quotes.

Discussion

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Hi @Pseud 14: this looks good. Only minor issues to take a look at. Grk1011 (talk) 14:54, 26 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for taking up this review Grk1011. I have addressed your comments and provided my response. LEt me know if there's anything I may have missed. Pseud 14 (talk) 16:23, 26 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
Looks great. Happy to pass this now. Grk1011 (talk) 16:53, 26 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
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