Talk:Rena Margulies Chernoff

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Moreno.ci in topic Peer Review

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Good start! What sections do you think the article will likely have? -Reagle (talk) 17:30, 25 September 2018 (UTC)Reply

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Hi @Hsienhsienlee,

Overall, I think this is a great article about a really interesting woman! I made some grammatical edits in a few places so that the piece reads a little more smoothly.

One sentence that I found to be a little confusing is "Avram married Hinda Tenenbaum, who was the daughter of Hershel Tenenbaum and raised Kozlowska Tenenbaum." I am not sure who Kozlowska is in this context.

I think you provide a lot of great information about Rena's life. Something that might strengthen the article is if you can find any awards or recognition that the book she wrote has received.

Finally, I don't think you can do this until your article is live, but once it is you should link your article to Rena's name on the Allan Chernoff page.

Nice job! Dipilato.k (talk) 19:49, 30 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

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Hey Coco! I'm glad you chose to write about this topic; there are many stories of the Holocaust which we should be made aware of. Some questions I had about your article included the same as Kayla, where I was wondering who Kozlowska Tenenbaum is in relation/important to Rena? I also think that the sentence in Family and Personal Life which begins "Instead of choosing an education..." sounds a bit biased; perhaps it could instead be changed to "Rather than/Instead of attending school, Hinda became a dressmaker..."

A source which I believe could be strengthened is under the History of the Holocaust in which you quote the population of European Jews after World War II. Other than that the other sources looked strong! Good job :)

Moreno.ci (talk) 17:03, 2 November 2018 (UTC)Reply