Talk:Revolt of the Admirals/GA1
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 21:00, 28 August 2020 (UTC)
I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:00, 28 August 2020 (UTC)
- @Sturmvogel 66: Has this been forgotten? Hawkeye7 (discuss) 10:53, 12 September 2020 (UTC)
- No DABs
- Photographs properly licensed
- Lots of overlinking
, the James Forrestal,
unnecessary article- Clarify that Radford was a hardliner opponent of unification
- The article says:
Radford was considered a hard liner on unification even in the Navy
Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:08, 13 September 2020 (UTC)- Indeed it does, but I still was unsure which way he felt. Add a "against" in lieu of "on" and the reader won't have the possibility of being unsure.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:11, 17 September 2020 (UTC)
- Oh, I understand now. have added a bit clarifying this. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 00:38, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
- Indeed it does, but I still was unsure which way he felt. Add a "against" in lieu of "on" and the reader won't have the possibility of being unsure.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:11, 17 September 2020 (UTC)
- The article says:
- The reduction from 213 air groups to 11 seems a much deeper cut than suffered by the other services. Is that number just for bomber groups or is that inclusive?
- Went back to the source (Rearden). Nominally, the Air Force had 63 groups, but many existed only on paper. Clarified this. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:56, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
- Hyphenate low-level bombing, atomic-capable, top-secret, radar-controlled
- Uh, okay. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:56, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
overrun, and an order
and- link capital ship, battleship, light cruiser, heavy cruiser, destroyer, class, blockade
Philadelphia Bulletin
"the" Philadelphia Bulletin- Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:56, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
10,000 pounds (4,500 kg) Little Boy
put in the proper adjectival form- Tweaked template parameters. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:56, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
- Was the smaller diameter of the Little Boy the reason it could be carried by a Neptune?
- Yes. Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:56, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
Joint Chief's
possessive plural- Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:56, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
Congress fund the 6A carrier
Missing suffixthe head of Convair's law firm
This is odd, usually corporations have a mix of in-house lawyers and retain outside law firms as needed.- Some firms find it cheaper to retain the services of a single law firm. It allows a business relationship to be built up, and means that it is always available when needed, and there are no surprises at billing time. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:56, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
- Move the link for Convair to it's first appearance other than the title of the B-36 article
- Tell the reader that Vinson chaired the hearings and that he was the committee chair. It's in the lede, but needs to be in the main body.
- It says:
Carl Vinson, the Chairman of the House Armed Services Committee, opened the hearings
- It says:
Matthews felt differently. He issued
Unclear antecedent, Matthews or Denfield?- Clarified. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:56, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
Symington and Vandenberg rebutted their previous testimony
What previous testimony?- The admirals. Clarified. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:56, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
- Who is Blandy?
- Not mentioned elsewhere, so deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:56, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
After year with
missing word?- Added "a". Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:56, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
- Masters' theses are generally not regarded as RS. Why should these be different?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:24, 13 September 2020 (UTC)
- Two are used. Lewis is just used for the source of some polling. The other is Dittmer, a first class thesis on Louis Denfeld. I rate it highly, and expect it will come out as a book in due course. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:56, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
- It's been a quarter century since Dittmer finished his thesis, I highly doubt that he'll actually be publishing it anytime soon. You're only hope of keeping it in is if Dittmer has published anything else on or near this topic. Much the same is true for Lewis, although I really doubt that you'll be able to find anything.
- Alright. The two have been removed. I had to cut two bits out. Unfortunate, as Lewis and Dittmer both sourced them to the Naval Institute Proceedings, but I don't have access to them myself. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 00:38, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
- It's been a quarter century since Dittmer finished his thesis, I highly doubt that he'll actually be publishing it anytime soon. You're only hope of keeping it in is if Dittmer has published anything else on or near this topic. Much the same is true for Lewis, although I really doubt that you'll be able to find anything.
- Two are used. Lewis is just used for the source of some polling. The other is Dittmer, a first class thesis on Louis Denfeld. I rate it highly, and expect it will come out as a book in due course. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:56, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
- Rosenberg, et al. needs to be properly formatted and provided with an ISBN or OCLC #
- Doesn't have either one. Obtained it from the DNSA via Proquest, so I can't even quote a URL. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 00:38, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
- Check and see if it's in [1]. And see if you can access the DNSA directly to get a URL. If none of these are successful, add a note that you accessed it through Proquest to give readers at least a hint.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:57, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
- Already tried that. It's in Google [2], but there's no preview. Added via ProQuest and ProQest id. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:16, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
- Check and see if it's in [1]. And see if you can access the DNSA directly to get a URL. If none of these are successful, add a note that you accessed it through Proquest to give readers at least a hint.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:57, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
- Doesn't have either one. Obtained it from the DNSA via Proquest, so I can't even quote a URL. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 00:38, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
- Fix the capitalization in Futrell