Talk:Rhapsomates/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Catlemur (talk · contribs)

Reviewer: Buidhe (talk · contribs) 06:17, 29 March 2024 (UTC)

Working (t · c) buidhe 06:17, 29 March 2024 (UTC)

Some initial thoughts:

• I'm not sure the lead meets MOS:LEAD. I would try adding a few sentences to make sure the article's main points are represented. For example, as it is there's no summary of the aftermath section.

@Buidhe: I have expanded the lede.--Catlemur (talk) 02:25, 1 April 2024 (UTC)

• "Doukas was forced to land his troops and fight a protracted campaign" Since no one is "forcing" him to do it, I think this needs to be reworded, to something like: "Because the revolt continued, Doukas landed troops and began what would become a protracted campaign".

 Done

• "Rhapsomates and the Immortals involved in the rising..." this is part of the aftermath, surely?

Moved to Aftermath.--Catlemur (talk) 00:54, 30 March 2024 (UTC)

• "suggesting that the revolt might have been directed at Alexios' fiscal policies" is this found in other sources? Otherwise it might be correct to attribute the historian making this connection

As mentioned in the article Cypriot historian Costas Kyrris also supports this theory.--Catlemur (talk) 00:54, 30 March 2024 (UTC)

• "Savvides, Alexis" source is not cited currently

Moved to Further reading.--Catlemur (talk) 00:54, 30 March 2024 (UTC)

(t · c) buidhe 14:23, 29 March 2024 (UTC)

• Images review : pass
• Sources review : pass (t · c) buidhe 22:32, 31 March 2024 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.