Talk:Rhodesia at the Olympics

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 18:35, 17 October 2016 (UTC)Reply


Will complete this one soon. JAGUAR  18:35, 17 October 2016 (UTC)Reply

  • "The dominion did not appear at the Games again under that banner until 1960" - unclear, what banner? Southern Rhodesia or just Rhodesia? Also link 1960 Summer Olympics
  • "best result until it became Zimbabwe in 1980" - link Zimbabwe
  • "including a field hockey team, to the 1964 Summer Games" - link 1964 Summer Olympics
  • "In 1965, Prime Minister Ian Smith" - link Ian Smith
  • "Hall, for example, won a gold medal in the welterweight division of the 1930 British Empire Games" - I would start this sentence with his first name (Leonard) included as it was confusing for a while
  • "In 1965, Southern Rhodesian Prime Minister Ian Smith declared a unilateral independence from Great Britain" - this would be the United Kingdom in this instance, as 'Great Britain' only refers to the the team
  • "Despite political machinations from Great Britain" - same again
  • No dead links
  • No dab links

This is looking good. I couldn't find any issues while spotchecking the sources and the article is well written. I only pointed out a few minor concerns like underlinking and clarity, but once they're clarified this should be good to go.   JAGUAR  19:01, 17 October 2016 (UTC)Reply

@Jaguar: Thanks for review! I think I have addressed all of these concerns, so please let me know what else needs to be done! Canadian Paul 12:23, 18 October 2016 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for addressing them! With all of those minor issues out the way this should be good to go.   JAGUAR  13:10, 18 October 2016 (UTC)Reply