Talk:Ribs (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 09:01, 2 January 2018 (UTC)

Lead

• The song was released as a → replace "The song" with "It" to avoid repetation
• Written by Lorde and Joel Little and produced by Little, with additional production from Lorde → Written and produced by Joel Little and Lorde,
• The track appeared → Commercially, the track appeared

Infobox

• Flawless ;)

Production and release

• and mixing handled by Little → and mixing handled by the latter
• was issued as a free → the "free" part isn't sourced by the reference, so I think it's the best to just leave it as "a promotional single"
• via iTunes Stores → via iTunes Stores by Universal Music (UMG).

Composition

• she references the Broken Social Scene → she references Canadian indie rock band Broken Social Scene's song
• Release year for "Lover's Split" in brackets

Live performances

• Lorde performed the song on 7 September → The singer also appeared on 7 September
• in Los Angeles, California.[15] On 3 October 2013, Lorde held a concert at the Warsaw in Brooklyn and performed the song among other tracks from the album. → in Los Angeles, California,[15] while also singing it a concert at the Warsaw in Brooklyn on 3 October 2013 alongside other material from the album
• Lorde performed this song at the Coachella Valley Music Festival → Lorde performed this version at the Coachella Valley Music Festival
• and also performed it at Manchester for her → and also used it for a Manchester gig during her
• You need to reference her appearance at the Coachella Valley Music Festival and the song's usage on her Melodrama Tour
• In the lead you say she performed the song on her debut concert tour, but it is not clear which one it is. Can you specify it here

Reception

• Move this section before "Live performances"
• You need to open the section with something like: Upon its release, "Ribs" received favorable reviews from music critics.
• particularly lyrically → I think that this is superfluous, as you say "Lorde had written"; how could she else praise Lorde's writing skills than lyrically?!
• Combine both paragraphs
• "Ribs" peaked at numbers → Commercially, "Ribs" peaked at numbers
• and UK streaming charts respectively → and British streaming charts, respectively
• reached number twenty-nine → reached number 29
• single also charted on the → single further reached number 26 on the

Track listing

• Flawless ;)

Charts

• Some Wikipedia policy wants Chart "(2013–14)" to be Chart "(2013–2014)"

Other stuff

Copy-violation

• 8.3% is very good!

References

• As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article

Outcome

• This article does need some work, but I think you can handle it ! Good luck; Cartoon network freak (talk) 10:09, 2 January 2018 (UTC)

Added in a lot more information to make it balanced and informative. Thank you! De88 (talk) 07:22, 3 January 2018 (UTC)

Gladly passing! Cartoon network freak (talk) 09:39, 3 January 2018 (UTC)

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