Talk:River/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: ForksForks (talk · contribs) 15:19, 1 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 23:53, 13 August 2024 (UTC)

Starting review. 750h+ 23:53, 13 August 2024 (UTC)

prose

lead

• A river is a natural flowing freshwater stream, flowing on ==> "A river is a natural freshwater stream that flows on"
• Water first enters rivers through precipitation, whether that be from remove "that be"
• Rivers flow and merge together in remove "together"
• in a straight line, instead they bend add a comma after "instead"
• which serves to carve rock ==> "which carves rock"
• People associate rivers with life and fertility, and have strong religious, political, social, and mythological attachments to them. remove the comma after "fertility"
• Rivers and river ecosystems are threatened by water pollution, climate change, as well as human activity. ==> "Rivers and river ecosystems are threatened by water pollution, climate change, and human activity."
• eliminated habitats, causing the extinction ==> "eliminated habitats, caused the extinction"

topography

• natural flow of fresh water that flows make "fresh water" a compound word
• This flow can be into a lake or ocean, or another river. ==> "This flow can be into a lake, an ocean, or another river."
• These in turn can still feed ==> "These, in turn, can still feed" (this is optional, but i prefer this)
• land stored in soil ==> "land stored in the soil"
• This phenomena is why ==> "This phenomenon is why"
• they eventually merge together to form larger remove "together"
• similar high elevation area, a canyon add a hyphen between "high" and "elevation"
• exhibit this behavior, and may even remove the comma
• sediment, also known as alluvium when because "also" is used once, i'd change this "also" to "often" or "sometimes"
• valleys or carried all the way to the sea remove "all the way"
• Rivers rarely will run in a straight direction, instead preferring to bend or meander. remove "will"
• will still serve to block the flow remove "serve to"
• causing it to reflect back in the remove "back"
• These areas may have floodplains, areas that are periodically flooded when there is a high level of water running through the river. "areas" is used twice. could one be replaced.
• where snow melt is required to fuel i'd both make "snow melt" and compound word and also link it to snowmelt
• diverse microorganisms, and have become an remove the comma
• This can happen in karst systems, areas where rock dissolves to form caves. remove "areas"
• used only for storm water or "storm water" should be a single word and also link it to stormwater
• flow down towards the ocean ==> "flow down toward the ocean"

classification

no problems here. 750h+ 10:07, 14 August 2024 (UTC)

ecology

• may be divided into a number of roles i'd change "a number of" to something like "several" or "numerous"
• roles, based on the River Continuum Concept remove the comma
• banks to prevent erosion, filter alluvium deposited ==> "banks to prevent erosion and filter alluvium deposited"
• Some fish may swim upstream in order to spawn as part ==> "Some fish may swim upstream to spawn as part"
• that travel from the sea in order to breed in freshwater ==> "that travel from the sea to breed in freshwater"
• Salmon are an anadramous fish that "anadromous" is spelt wrong

human uses

• involves a large scale collection of add a hyphen between "large" and "scale"
• river engineering structures, that have the remove the comma
• to the flow of the river, beneath its surface remove the comma
• They may also be used for hydroelectricity, power generation from rivers. ==> "They may also be used for hydroelectricity and power generation from rivers."
• focused in China, India and other areas in Asia add a comma after "India"
• Three such civilizations ere the i think "ere" should be "were"
• Humans have been building infrastructure to make use of rivers ==> "Humans have been building infrastructure to use rivers"
• Roman civilization made use of aqueducts ==> "Roman civilization use aqueducts"
• floodplain-based civilations may have "civilizations" is spelt wrong
• destroying infrastructure; however there is evidence that permanent add a comma after "however"
• The Sadd el-Kafara dam near Cairo, Egypt is add a comma after "Egypt" (in American English, after the name of a location, a comma is needed)
• Water wheels turn an axle which can supply change "which" to "than"
• many aspects manual labor ==> "many aspects of manual labor"
• needed less protection, as humans remove comma
• Rivers helped fuel urbanization, since goods remove the comma
• and transportation to modern times, when remove the comma
• due to concerns of pollution and the spread change "of" to "about"
• The two cultures speak different languages, and rarely mix. remove the comma
• Commission in order to manage ==> "Commission to manage"
• Up to 60% of fresh water that is used by countries ==> "Up to 60% of freshwater used by countries"
• rivers throughout the human history remove "the"
• that the soul of those who "soul" ==> "souls"
• the River Lethe in order to forget their previous ==> "the River Lethe to forget their previous"
• milk, wine, and honey respectively add a comma after "honey"
• have also cared for specific rivers as sacred rivers. unbold "sacred rivers"
• The Nile had a number of gods ==> "The Nile had many gods"
• revered, the he Ganges is most sacred i think it should be "the Ganges"

threats to rivers

• i'd recommend changing the section title from "threats to rivers" to "threats"
• PFAS is a widely used chemical that breaks down at a very slow rate.[41] PFAS has been found in the bodies of humans and animals worldwide, as well as in the soil, with potentially negative health effects. ==> "Per- and polyfluoroalkyl substances (PFAS) is a widely used chemical that breaks down at a slow rate.[41] It has been found in the bodies of humans and animals worldwide, as well as in the soil, with potentially negative health effects."
• Cities often have a network of storm drains that remove "a network of"
• This is in part because a projected loss ==> "This is in part because of a projected loss "
• can restore the natural habit of river species ==> "can restore the natural habits of river species"

sources

• Spotchecks check out. Images look fine too. The article has a very unlikely copyright violation of 5.7% from a NatGeo source. Passing. 750h+ 10:07, 14 August 2024 (UTC)

verdict

Fine work. Maybe with a bit of copyediting and a WP:PR this could be taken to WP:FA status. Placing on hold. 750h+ 10:07, 14 August 2024 (UTC)

All set with these changes. ForksForks (talk) 12:44, 14 August 2024 (UTC)

Passing 750h+ 12:46, 14 August 2024 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.