Talk:Road Rash 3/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 11:12, 3 May 2021 (UTC)Reply


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  • Much as I love it, "fisticuffs" seems like an informal term for an encyclopedia.
  • "worldwide locales" settings instead of locales.
  • "need for a marketable feature" all things need to be marketable, was this more for "global" appeal?
  • EA is overlinked in the infobox.
  • Lead should probably mention motorcycle.
  • "in third-place or" no need to hyphenate.
  • "... third-place or higher among..." etc is a complicated sentence! Could you split it?
  • "number of locales around" locations or settings.
  • "access a bike shop" lots of "bike" in this sentence, at least ditch this one.
  • "player may potentially purchase" why potentially? If they can afford it, presumably they can.
  • "at a password entry screen" -> "at an entry screen"
  • "Motorcycle cops" cop is a colloquial term, not encyclopedic.
  • I don't think we need to link "helicopter".
  • "repo man for the bike shop or a snitch" these terms could be linked though.
  • "Breen serving as producer" no need for this serving.
  • What's 3DO?
  • What are "gameplay sprites"?
  • What's Sega CD?
  • complimented or complemented?
  • Link Megadrive.

That's it on a quick review, so on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 16:20, 3 May 2021 (UTC)Reply

All points have been addressed. Cat's Tuxedo (talk) 17:21, 3 May 2021 (UTC)Reply
Ok, suits me, so promoting. Good work. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 18:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)Reply