Talk:Robb Butler/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:51, 20 November 2017 (UTC)

Going to review this piece of work. MWright96 (talk) 20:51, 20 November 2017 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "He earned All-State honors in football his senior year in 1998." - make a slight adjustment to the text in bold so it reads as in football for his senior year in 1998  Done
• Wikilink passes and yards to Glossary of American football for non-experts of the sport.  Done

Early years

• Pittsburgh, Pennslyvania is a redirect link  Done
• Omit PNC Bank as the sponsor of the Big 33 Classic game as it is irrelevant  Done
• "He garnered first team All-Pittsburgh City League" - gained  Done
• Explain what a reception, touchdown and interception is meant in football terms by adding a wikilink to each of the three words  Done
• "He accumulated six interceptions his junior year and six interceptions his senior season as well." - during his junior year & in his senior season  Done
• "Robb visited Pittsburgh," - please use Butler  Done

College career

• You've already wikilinked the Pittsurgh Panthers and Letterman (sports) in the previous section and you don't need another here  Done
• "his sophomore year in 2000" - a slight rewording to during his sophomore year in 2000 will help  Done
• Wikilink pass breakups to Pass deflects  Done
• Do the same with forced fumble which must be linked to Fumble  Done
• earning First Team Division I-AA All-American honors." - should be changed to earning him First Team Division I-AA All-American honors.  Done
• Strong safety is a redirect link to Safety (Gridiron and American football)  Done

Professional career

• Spell out the NFL in its full name and put the acronyms in parentheses like you have done in th lead.  Done
• "He was released by the Chargers on September 5 and signed to the team's practice squad on September 6, 2004" -He was released by the Chargrs on September 5 and signed to the team's practice squad the following day.  Done
• Added a link to kickoffs  Done
• "signed by the Brigade on March 18 and placed on recallable waivers on March 27." - this piece of text would be better of being written as signed by the Brigade on March 18 and placed on recallable waivers nine days later.  Done
• The Erie RiverRats and the American Indoor Football Association are redirect links  Done

Personal life

• I will permit you to either write out MBA or wikilink the term.  Done

References

• Reference 26 is a permantely dead link. Can you find a replacement source?  Done
• Be consistent in how you present the work in your citations as you use a mixture of for example Pittsburgh Post-Gazette and old.post-gazette.com in another  Done

That's all from me on this review. On hold until all of the queries have been addressed. MWright96 (talk) 21:29, 20 November 2017 (UTC)

Think that's everything. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 03:38, 22 November 2017 (UTC)

@WikiOriginal-9: Yes it is indeed. Can now promote to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 09:37, 22 November 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 09:42, 22 November 2017 (UTC)