Talk:Robby Fabbri

GA Review

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Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 17:44, 1 July 2020 (UTC)

Reviewing later. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 17:44, 1 July 2020 (UTC)

• Summarizing four years with the Blues into two sentences in the lead might not be sufficient.  Done
• His mother's name is mentioned in ref 6, maybe add it on to the sentence about his heritage?
  • Found his dad's name too. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:03, 8 July 2020 (UTC)
• I know it's split between sections, but having two sentences beginning with "Growing up" doesn't sound that good.  Done
• "and played with the year above his with" Who's "his" in this case?  Done
• "150lbs" {{convert}} needed for this and 160lbs. Done
  • Done HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:03, 8 July 2020 (UTC)
• "replace centre Tanner Richard on the team's" Might bet better to say the Rebels' first line for clarity. Done
• "the Windsor Spitfires where he recorded one assist" Comma after Spitfires. Done
• This is a better source for ref 17.  Done
• "of the Game 1" Remove the "the" or go with "of the first game".  Done
• "resulting in a 10 game suspension" That's not Fabbri getting suspended, right?

Right, it was the guy who hit him. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 15:19, 8 July 2020 (UTC)

• "However" x 3 WP:EDITORIAL. Done
• Make sure you link the penalties and use the correct link for the coronavirus.  Done
• Ref 67 got deleted, you will want to find a new source. Done
  • Deleted ref and removed name

That should be it. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 06:45, 8 July 2020 (UTC)

Nova Crystallis, done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 15:19, 8 July 2020 (UTC)