Talk:Roger Mowry Tavern

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 21:36, 18 January 2015 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman 21:36, 18 January 2015 (UTC)

Here's what I found:

• "The originally a one and a half story single room house with a chamber upstairs, the house was expanded with a two story lean-to by 1711 and at an unknown time, " Rm the, start sentence with Originally.
• "The original portion of the house was restored by The Roger Mowry Tavern was the oldest house in" Looks like it's missing a word or phrase here.
• "appear in the America's in" rm apostrophe, though I'd just remove it and keep the sentence to "The first records of Roger Mowry appear in Boston, Massachusetts."
• "On May 18, 1631, noted that Roger Mawry desire to be a freeman." Mowry. Also, who noted?
• "A family monument lists Mowry has having twelve children," as having
• "By the time of Isham's restoration, the house had been greatly altered," This is the first mention of a restoration by Isham, and it feels rather sudden. That's at least something I'd make a small mention of in the lead or note the restoration on his first mention.
• "and the tavern may have been a contribution reason for the passage of a law " a contributing reason

A bit on the sloppy side compared to what I usually see from you, but nonetheless the fixes are easy. I'll put the article on hold and pass when the above is fixed. Wizardman 22:02, 18 January 2015 (UTC)

@Wizardman: - I see what you mean and did many more fixes in the process. Thanks for checking it out. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 05:55, 19 January 2015 (UTC)

Looks better now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman 17:05, 19 January 2015 (UTC)