Talk:Ron Taylor (actor)/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Wizardman in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 12:36, 21 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

I'll give this a review within the next couple days. Wizardman 12:36, 21 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

Here are the issues I found:

  • "Taylor was born Ronald James Taylor on October 16, 1952" It can just say "Ronald James Taylor was born on.."; cleaner that way
    • Done
  • "He attended Wharton College and later O'Connell High School,[5]" He attended college before high school? I'm confused here (the wharton college link didn't help so maybe adding something there would fix this).
    • Fixed (I'm assuming this was a combination of misreading the source, forgetting college meant a different thing in America)
  • "the history of blues music, from" no comma needed
    • Done
  • "cornucopia of splendidly interpreted song," is that meant to say songs or is that the actual quote?
    • That's the quote
  • ""build a long-lasting audience like the Tonys could", leading to dwindling attendance." cite needed for quote.
    • Done
  • "the year,It" space after comma.
    • Done
  • Ref #11 (Drama Desk Awards) isn't working for me. Site's up so a new link may need to be found.
    • Fixed

Not too much to fix, I'll put the article on hold. Wizardman 16:43, 22 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

Haha, I'd forgotten about this, it's been months! I should probably help out with reviews. Anyway, all fixed (I think), thanks very much! Gran2 17:39, 22 November 2012 (UTC)Reply
Everything checks out now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman 22:09, 22 November 2012 (UTC)Reply