Talk:Rose Tyler/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 11:44, 23 June 2012 (UTC)

General

• No problems with imaging.
• No concerns about the reliability of sources.
• No dab links.
• One dead link.

• Updated to the 2008 version of the BBC website

• All BBC News/Newsround refs should be formatted like how Ref 99 is, per consistency.

• Fixed.

• The em dash has been used incorrectly throughout the article. Per WP:DASH, do not use spaced em dashes, use it unspaced however: Another "planet" was detected—but it was later found to be a moon of Saturn.
• Have added 'citation needed' tags for questionable quotes/statements.

• replaced with references.

• For Ref 84, Organgrider is not the work, and nor is The Guardian, it's guardian.co.uk.

• Changed.

• Ref 94 was also published on guardian.co.uk, not The Guardian, which refers to the newspaper.

• Changed.

• Ref 50's author is Sally Kinnes, not Russell T Davies.

• Fixed.

Appearances

• "Here, she is saved" ? Perhaps "There, she is saved"?
• Replace comma in "Rose learns the importance of not tampering with history, when she attempts..." with em or en dash depending on your preference.
• "...come to understand the meaning of this phrase when they come face to face with an unstoppable...", come is a tad repetitive here, perhaps you could rephrase it.
• "and becomes suffused" ? "becoming suffused"
• "to lead herself to this moment" ? "leading herself to the moment"
• "After defeating a werewolf they are" comma between 'warewolf' and 'they'.
• "...whilst setting up the Torchwood Institute which aims...", place comma between 'Institute' and 'which'
• alternate-universe should not be hypenated

• Fixed all of these.

Development

• "Following "Doomsday" Piper...", comma before Piper
• "In the first series finale Rose" comma before Rose
• rewatched does not need to be hypenated
• should it be humanise per British spelling?

• Fixed all of these concerns.

Reception

• "She was listed as the second-best female companion behind Sarah Jane Smith by The Daily Telegraph's Gavin Fuller, and the second-best companion behind Sarah Jane by Daniel Martin of The Guardian in 2007" could be easily changed to → "She was listed as the second-best female companion behind Sarah Jane Smith by The Daily Telegraph's Gavin Fuller and Daniel Martin of The Guardian in 2007", to get straight to the point.

  redacted the sentence a bit.

Otherwise, a neat article (haven't watched Doctor Who in a while but never missed an episode during the Eccleston and Tennant era) and would be happy to pass provided changes are made. On hold for seven days. Lemonade51 (talk) 12:29, 23 June 2012 (UTC)

• I think I've taken care of everything raised. Thank you very much for the constructive review. Let me know if there's anything outstanding or that can still be improved.Eshlare (talk) 15:17, 23 June 2012 (UTC)