Talk:Roy Conacher/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Wizardman in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 17:40, 4 January 2014 (UTC)Reply

Been a while since I reviewed a hockey guy, so I'll give this a shot. Wizardman 17:40, 4 January 2014 (UTC)Reply

Here are the issues I found:

  • "Conacher played his minor hockey with the Toronto Marlboro organization with whom he was a member of Ontario provincial championship winning teams at the bantam and midget age groups." This feels a bit like a run-on to me. Not sure how to reword it, it just sounds off when said aloud.
    Fixed?
  • "for the following two seasons where led the Halifax city league" missing a word
  • Fixed. Also broke up another run-on sentence.
  • The couple uses of colons don't seem appropriate; double-check those.
  • Removed a couple. Fixed?

Just a couple minor fixes, I'll put on hold and pass when fixed. Wizardman 03:39, 7 January 2014 (UTC)Reply

Done, hopefully! Appreciate the review! Resolute 04:01, 8 January 2014 (UTC)Reply
Everything checks out here, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman 04:36, 11 January 2014 (UTC)Reply