Talk:Russian battleship Gangut (1911)/GA1

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Reviewer: JonCatalán^(Talk) 21:56, 7 October 2010 (UTC)

Changes

The following are changes I made, apart from any light ce I might have done, to the text.

• "Gangut ([Гангут] Error: {{Langx}}: text has italic markup (help)) was the lead ship of the Gangut-class battleships of the Imperial Russian Navy built before World War I, although she was the last to be completed." → I thought it flowed better as follows, "Gangut ([Гангут] Error: {{Langx}}: text has italic markup (help)) was both the lead ship of the Gangut-class battleships of the Imperial Russian Navy built before World War I and the last of her class to be completed."

Comments

Here are some comments on the text.

• "The Russians did not believe that superfiring turrets offered any advantage, discounting the value of axial fire..." → The language is a bit technical. Maybe you can make a quick note explaining what axial fire is — in a set of em dashes.
• "She completed with only a single 3-inch (76 mm) 30-caliber Lender anti-aircraft (AA) gun mounted on the quarterdeck." → "She completed with..." sounds a bit awkward, I think.
• "Conway's says that four 75-millimeter (3.0 in) were added to the roofs of the end turrets during the war." → Four 75-millimeter what?

Other

• Prose is clear and concise.
• Article is stable.
• File:Gangutlayboard1909.jpg → The tag is fine, but you might want to replace the older tag with the new pd-old template.

Looks good. The above are just suggestions. JonCatalán^(Talk) 22:39, 7 October 2010 (UTC)