Talk:Ryan Crouser/GA1
Latest comment: 5 months ago by CipherSleuth in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Arconning (talk · contribs) 11:01, 29 February 2024 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking on the review. I look forward to addressing the comments. I'm out of town until Sunday, but I can promptly work on this when I return. CipherSleuth (talk) 17:12, 29 February 2024 (UTC)
- Noted, hope the article turns out well! Arconning (talk) 14:39, 1 March 2024 (UTC)
I will be reviewing this article, comments will probably be finished in the next 48 hours! Good luck to the editors! Arconning (talk · contribs) 11:01, 29 February 2024 (UTC)
- Hi, I have addressed all your comments. Happy to discuss if any points need clarifying or did not meet expectations. Thanks for your time. CipherSleuth (talk) 22:20, 3 March 2024 (UTC)
- Well-written:
- Reformatting/Replacing:
- Use of the word heave in the article is a bit too informal, suggest replacing to throw.
- Done
- I heavily suggest using timephrases such as "a month later" and "the following year" since the article looks like a timeline rather than an overview.
- Done –– I modified a sentences where applicable to use timephrases like you suggested.
- 12 Indoor Championships, and he secured, replace , and with where.
- June 2017, and he competed in..., replace and he with then.
- Done
- Use of the word he:
- Crouser holds the world record..., replace Crouser with He, and add As of [DATE],... on the start of the sentence.
- In his fourth year, the athlete, I suggest using he instead of the athlete but that's on you.
- Done
- Ryan started participating..., use He instead of Ryan.
- Done
- Adding text:
- Crouser was born on 18 December 1992 in Portland, Oregon, add comma on the end.
- Adding spaces:
- ...in Bressanone, Italy.There,..., add between Italy. and There.
- Done
- Sentences that have shotput to shot put.
- Done
- Removing words:
- he opted to switch his major from engineering, omit he.
- Done
- Lists in Achievements; I suggest to change to similar list formats such as in Tyson Gay and Yulimar Rojas. Make the list dates in descending order to follow format in alike articles about athletes. Also rename to Major results, International competitions, or something similar instead.
- Done –– I added a column to each table in this section with the year, allowing the viewer to sort by year of achievement. I also changed the heading "NCAA competition" to "NCAA championships". All the headings are now consistent with having "competition" in the name, just modified by whether it's global, national, or NCAA.
- @CipherSleuth I forgot to mention to make the list in ascending order, starting with older years then working your way to more recent! If this is addressed I believe I can pass it!
- @User:Arconning The tables have been modified to present the years in ascending order. — Preceding unsigned comment added by CipherSleuth (talk • contribs) 16:19, 6 March 2024 (UTC)
- I suggest changing Collegiate competition to Collegiate career or something similar. Same with Early life and youth sports to Early life and youth career.
- In addition,, suggest removing. See Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Words to watch#Unsupported attributions.
- Not done Thanks for pointing this out. I reviewed the MOS and did not identify in this particular usage that it presented a problem.
- Inconsistency:
- Usage of 18 December 1992 and December 18, 1992, suggest using the "m/d/y" dating format as the article is about an American athlete. See Wikipedia:Manual of Style#Retaining existing styles. Can also be found in 9 February, On 24 January,, 11 August 2021., etc., I suggest following the pattern to be consistent.
- Use meters instead of metres in the list World Athletics Rankings. Either use only m or meters when being consistent in the article when describing measurements, examples such as throwing 21.21 m to defeat Stephen Mozia..., ...a third of all 22-m throws in the history of the sport., and ...and in Zagreb with 22.09 meters..
- Done
- Hyperlinks:
- ...in what World Athletics called..., World Athletics.
- Done
- ...23.51 m in Budapest..., Budapest.
- Done
- ...alternate on the 1984 Olympic..., 1984 Olympic using 1984 Summer Olympics.
- Done
- ...new World Championship record, List of World Athletics Championships records.
- Done
- Verifiable with no original research:
- [1] Seems shady, hold for check.
- Pass.
- Earwig puts up nothing, did a manual spot check nothing to be seen.
- Broad in its coverage:
- Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
- Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
- Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
- I suggest arranging the images for his campaign at the 2016 Summer Olympics to be a bit more organized.
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(a) (references) | All references arranged in the list. | |
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Reviewer has no notes, everything looks centered to the person with no bias. |
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Article is stable, no ongoing edit war or content disputes. |
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(a) (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales) | Every image complies. | |
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edit- Nicknames, height, and weight in the infobox should be included in the body of the article and sourced.
- Statements that need sources:
- He was the first American man to win the event since 2004.
- Done
- At the 2015 NCAA Outdoor Championships, Crouser placed fifth in both the shotput and the discus.
- Done
- Crouser won another national title in the shot put in June 2017, and he competed in the event at the 2017 World Championships in London, where he finished sixth. At the 2018 USA Outdoor Championships on 23 June, he placed second with a throw of 20.99 m, behind Darrell Hill's 21.57 m. In the Diamond League, an annual series of international competitions, he won in Eugene with a throw of 22.53 meters, in Monaco with 22.05 meters, and in Zagreb with 22.09 meters.
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- On 19 July, he resumed competition on at the American Track League Meet, achieving a personal best of 22.91 m and the fourth best mark in history. The American ended the year undefeated in all 11 meets in which he participated.
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- On 27 February, Crouser finished first in the shot put at the 2022 USA Indoor Track and Field Championships.
- Done
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