Talk:Ryan Kesler/GA1
Latest comment: 15 years ago by ThinkBlue in topic GA Review
GA Review
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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
This article is in decent shape, but it needs more work before it becomes a Good Article.
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- In the Ohio State University section, "As a freshman, Kesler scored eleven goals and twenty assists to finish fourth in team scoring behind junior and Hobey Baker finalist R. J. Umberger", it wouldn't hurt to say that Hobey Baker is an award. I mean I know the link is there, but like I said, it wouldn't hurt. In the Vancouver Canucks section, "He scored his first NHL goal five nights later against the Calgary Flames' Jamie McLennan", reads very odd. Same section, "When NHL play resumed for the 2005–06 NHL season, Kesler joined the Canucks for his first full season with the team", I think I know what you mean with the sentence, but it might be best to re-write the beginning of it. Same section, "Boulerice was subsequently suspended for 25 games, matching the then largest suspension in the NHL's history.[35].", just need one period. In the International play section, paragraph two is a but repetitive with "Kesler", might be a good idea to have a consistency.
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- In the Ohio State University section, "As a freshman, Kesler scored eleven goals and twenty assists to finish fourth in team scoring behind junior and Hobey Baker finalist R. J. Umberger", it wouldn't hurt to say that Hobey Baker is an award. I mean I know the link is there, but like I said, it wouldn't hurt. In the Vancouver Canucks section, "He scored his first NHL goal five nights later against the Calgary Flames' Jamie McLennan", reads very odd. Same section, "When NHL play resumed for the 2005–06 NHL season, Kesler joined the Canucks for his first full season with the team", I think I know what you mean with the sentence, but it might be best to re-write the beginning of it. Same section, "Boulerice was subsequently suspended for 25 games, matching the then largest suspension in the NHL's history.[35].", just need one period. In the International play section, paragraph two is a but repetitive with "Kesler", might be a good idea to have a consistency.
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- In the lead, it would be best if "Vancouver Canucks" was linked once, per here. In the Vancouver Canucks section, link "Philadelphia Flyers" once.
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- In the lead, it would be best if "Vancouver Canucks" was linked once, per here. In the Vancouver Canucks section, link "Philadelphia Flyers" once.
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
- C. It contains no original research:
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- In the Vancouver Canucks section, this ---> "After originally escaping punishment", sounds like POV.
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- In the Vancouver Canucks section, this ---> "After originally escaping punishment", sounds like POV.
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- If the statements above can be answered, I will pass the article. Good luck with improving this article!
- Pass or Fail:
-- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 19:59, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
- I have addressed your concerns. Just a couple of specifics:
- "He scored his first NHL goal five nights later against the Calgary Flames' Jamie McLennan" and "When NHL play resumed for the 2005–06 NHL season, Kesler joined the Canucks for his first full season with the team" - I changed both of these sentences to try and clarify them. Let me know what you think, or if you have any suggestions to improve them further.
- "After originally escaping punishment" - Expanded this sentence to clarify that the NHL announced he would not receive a suspension, but later suspended him when new video emerged.
- Please let me know if you have any other concerns. Thanks for the review! – Nurmsook! talk... 20:28, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
- Check (on all of the above). Thank you to Nurmsook for getting the stuff I left at the talk page, because I have gone off and placed the article as GA. Congrats. ;) -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 21:02, 19 February 2009 (UTC)