Talk:Ryan Lavarnway/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by HickoryOughtShirt?4 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 15:40, 29 June 2020 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
  1. a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall: Pass
    Pass/Fail:  

Review

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Lead

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  • It jumps from team to team (ie. During the season, he played in the Oakland Athletics organization, playing six games in the major leagues for them. He was a 2018 mid-season Triple-A All Star for the Nashville Sounds.). Can you make it a smoother transition?

Early life

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  • Please add a reference for his birthday
    • You may want to check out this reference [1]
  • Reference #3 doesn't state Lavarnway was born in Burbank, California, and grew up in Woodland Hills, California + the other refs are dead (see section title "References")
  • Please move Ref 4 to the end of the sentence From watching his father play softball games, Lavarnway developed an interest in baseball at a young age. Then Ref 6 can go after He played catcher in Little League, and Ref 4 after his favorite major league player growing up was Jason Varitek.
  • Why are 4 references needed to prove At El Camino Real High School, Lavarnway caught as a junior but played outfield for the "Conquistadors" baseball team as a senior?

College career

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  • Why are 3 references needed for Lavarnway attended Yale University, where he majored in philosophy and played baseball for the Yale Bulldogs in the Ivy League?
  • You can remove he said.
  • For the Ivy Player and Rookie of the Week honor, you can use your reference from the JPOST that's already used in the article.
  • Please expand on his rookie year
  • Reference 13 + 15 doesn't state In 2007, Lavarnway moved back to catcher
  • Since his Yale Bulldogs profile is dead, you need a new reference for his accomplishments
  • Reference 17 +18 doesn't prove the sentence it's supposed to support
  • Are 3 references needed to prove He missed the last 11 games of the year after breaking the scaphoid bone in his left wrist while diving into home plate in April?
  • Reference 14 doesn't prove the sentence it's supposed to support

Career

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Boston Red Sox

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  • Reference doesn't say 6th round
  • Neither reference proves He signed for a $325,000 signing bonus
  • Are 5 references necessary?
  • Can you WL optioned to Major League Baseball transactions#Options?
  • Reference 57 + 64 have a different title
  • Are four references needed to prove He had surgery to remove the hamate bone from his left wrist at the Cleveland Clinic on June 4 and began a rehab assignment with Portland on July 21?
  • Reference 66 needs an author

Baltimore Orioles

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  • Reference 69 needs the author (Tim Britton)
  • Reference 70 needs the author (Bill Plunkett)
  • Reference 78 needs access-date
  • camdenchat is not a reliable source

Miami Marlins

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Dead references

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