Talk:Ryan Lavarnway/GA1
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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 15:40, 29 June 2020 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall: Pass
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Review
editLead
edit- It jumps from team to team (ie.
During the season, he played in the Oakland Athletics organization, playing six games in the major leagues for them. He was a 2018 mid-season Triple-A All Star for the Nashville Sounds.
). Can you make it a smoother transition?
Early life
edit- Please add a reference for his birthday
- You may want to check out this reference [1]
- Reference #3 doesn't state
Lavarnway was born in Burbank, California, and grew up in Woodland Hills, California
+ the other refs are dead (see section title "References")- His MLB profile says Woodland Hills [2]
- Most of the sources state Lavarnway was born in Burbank, then moved to Woodland Hills - I'm going to assume MLB.com is mistaken. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:50, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
- His MLB profile says Woodland Hills [2]
- Please move Ref 4 to the end of the sentence
From watching his father play softball games, Lavarnway developed an interest in baseball at a young age
. Then Ref 6 can go afterHe played catcher in Little League,
and Ref 4 afterhis favorite major league player growing up was Jason Varitek
.- I've changed up the refs; the ones provided now validate both sentences. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:50, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
- Why are 4 references needed to prove
At El Camino Real High School, Lavarnway caught as a junior but played outfield for the "Conquistadors" baseball team as a senior
?- 3/4 are dead and the one useable reference doesn't state what year he played outfield in.
- Down to 1, and text changed to reflect only what it says. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:52, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
- 3/4 are dead and the one useable reference doesn't state what year he played outfield in.
College career
edit- Why are 3 references needed for
Lavarnway attended Yale University, where he majored in philosophy and played baseball for the Yale Bulldogs in the Ivy League
? - You can remove
he said
. - For the Ivy Player and Rookie of the Week honor, you can use your reference from the JPOST that's already used in the article.
- Please expand on his rookie year
- Reference 13 + 15 doesn't state
In 2007, Lavarnway moved back to catcher
- Since his Yale Bulldogs profile is dead, you need a new reference for his accomplishments
- Reference 17 +18 doesn't prove the sentence it's supposed to support
- Are 3 references needed to prove
He missed the last 11 games of the year after breaking the scaphoid bone in his left wrist while diving into home plate in April
? - Reference 14 doesn't prove the sentence it's supposed to support
Career
editBoston Red Sox
edit- Reference doesn't say 6th round
- Neither reference proves
He signed for a $325,000 signing bonus
- Use this reference
- Are 5 references necessary?
- Can you WL optioned to Major League Baseball transactions#Options?
- Reference 57 + 64 have a different title
- Are four references needed to prove
He had surgery to remove the hamate bone from his left wrist at the Cleveland Clinic on June 4 and began a rehab assignment with Portland on July 21
? - Reference 66 needs an author
Baltimore Orioles
edit- Reference 69 needs the author (Tim Britton)
- Reference 70 needs the author (Bill Plunkett)
- Reference 78 needs access-date
- camdenchat is not a reliable source
Miami Marlins
edit- Please expand on the season. If it stopped due to COVID, please state his stats at the time of the pause in play.
- The season never even started in the first place - nothing to write about yet. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:30, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
- Marlins' Ryan Lavarnway: Invited to summer camp
Dead references
edit- Ref #1 is dead. If it is the same ref as this one, it can probably be deleted. It is still available here
- Ref #2 is dead. It is still available here
- Ref #7, 8, 10 are dead.
- Ref #11 is dead. It is still available here
- Reference 16 is dead. It is still available here
- Reference 23 + 24 are dead
- Reference 33 – 35 are dead
- Reference 37 is dead
- Reference 39 + 40 are dead
- Reference 42 is dead
- Reference 46 is dead
- Reference 52 is dead but you can use this one or this one
- Reference 60 is dead
- Reference 72 is dead
- Reference 79 is dead
- Reference 82 is dead
- Numbers have changed a bit now, but I believe I have all these corrected or deleted. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:42, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
- Sanfranciscogiants17, thanks for the fixes. Passing now. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:19, 3 July 2020 (UTC)
- Numbers have changed a bit now, but I believe I have all these corrected or deleted. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:42, 2 July 2020 (UTC)