Talk:SMS Amazone/GA1
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Reviewer: ChrisGualtieri (talk · contribs) 16:02, 12 December 2012 (UTC)
I'll be reviewing this soon. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 16:02, 12 December 2012 (UTC)
Found a mistake in lede. 'World was I' fixed to World War I
Term 'elderly' in removed from service history. Awkward as 'elderly light cruisers'.
One issue remains with this sentence, "Then-Korvettenkapitän Alfred Saalwächter, later a senior admiral during World War II, took command of the ship in 1926" It doesn't read well.
Simplified checklist. Reliable sources: check Neutral: check Coverage: check Images: check Edit wars: check
Putting it on hold to address that one issue. Its trivial, but you can write better prose then I. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 05:18, 19 December 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks again, Chris - I rephrased the sentence in question, how does it read now? Parsecboy (talk) 11:06, 19 December 2012 (UTC)
- Yep passed. Other issue was fixed yesterday by me as well. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 04:03, 21 December 2012 (UTC)