Talk:SMS Ostfriesland/GA1
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Reviewer: WikiCopter (t • c • g • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 03:19, 2 January 2011 (UTC) I am stunned by this article (I always am ; ). I am confident that you will be able to quickly adjust the article to my expectations as the reviewer. The only thing I can see at the moment is that nothing is included about the dramatic influence of the video recording of Ostfriesland's sinking on American public opinion. Just a note, I have only limited access over the next week, so expect slow responses. Good luck! WikiCopter (t • c • g • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 03:19, 2 January 2011 (UTC)
- "On 18 August, Admiral Scheer attempted a repeat of the 31 May operation; the two serviceable German battlecruisers—Moltke and Von der Tann—supported by three dreadnoughts, were to bombard the coastal town of Sunderland in an attempt to draw out and destroy Beatty's battlecruisers." I believe that the rest of the battlecruisers were severely damaged in the Battle of Jutland, correct? WikiCopter (t • c • g • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 03:25, 2 January 2011 (UTC)
- Alright, I added a paragraph on the reaction to the bombing and the controversy, as well as a note on the battlecruisers after Jutland. Thanks for reviewing the article and your compliments :) Parsecboy (talk) 20:18, 2 January 2011 (UTC)
Comment: Massie is cited in the text but not listed in the references.XavierGreen (talk) 01:33, 3 January 2011 (UTC)
- Added - thanks for catching that. Sadly enough, SMS Helgoland made it through ACR and FAC without anyone noticing that I had forgotten to list Campbell in the references. Parsecboy (talk) 13:23, 3 January 2011 (UTC)
- Some final comments:
- captions and images are good, licenceses check out.
- in the infobox armor needs conversion for the turrets, type of armor would also be appreciated in the infobox.
Other than that, the article looks great. Pending completion or response for the final comments, article is on hold. When comments are met, I will probably pass the article. WikiCopter (t • c • g • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 03:04, 9 January 2011 (UTC)
- I added a link to Krupp cemented armour, though the 300mm for the turret armor is converted directly above for the belt. If the same figures are close together, you don't need to convert them every time (and in fact it's preferred that you don't). Thanks again for reviewing the article. Parsecboy (talk) 12:43, 9 January 2011 (UTC)
- Good job. Passed. WikiCopter (t • c • g • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 15:14, 9 January 2011 (UTC)