Talk:SMS Sachsen (1916)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 23:45, 10 January 2020 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:45, 10 January 2020 (UTC)

• No DABs
• Images appropriately licensed, diagram sourced
• Picture box caption: Why not just say that Bayern is Sachsen's sister or half-sister, if you want to be more precise?
  • Done
• In the lede shouldn't but never finished be set off by commas as it's a dependent clause?
  • Yeah
• discarded the steam engine "exchanged" perhaps?
  • Good idea
• Link secondary armament, Schichau, battery
  • Done
• Use broadside rather than beam for the torpedo tubes, easier to explain (link) that term than to explain that this isn't the same as width.
  • Done
• Link construction number to yard number and add to the infobox
  • Done
• As a result, work stopped on Sachsen altogether, Doesn't follow from the preceding sentence. A missing word somewhere, I suspect.
  • Actually, the "not" in the preceding sentence shouldn't have been there.
• diesel engine was converted into four of the Type U 151 submarines A neat trick, but I wonder how a six-cylinder engine could be split between four subs?
  • That's a good question
    • Isn't it, though? "Converted" reads oddly to me, perhaps "divided amongst" or "incorporated into", or some such?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:06, 25 January 2020 (UTC)
      • How does this sound? Parsecboy (talk) 14:58, 25 January 2020 (UTC)
        • That'll work.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:50, 25 January 2020 (UTC)
• eight main guns, though the remaining pair "and"?
  • Done
• Which deck is the battery deck?
  • Clarified in the text
• , after which dismantling began; work lasted until 1923 awkward--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:55, 18 January 2020 (UTC)
  • Reworded. Thanks Sturm. Parsecboy (talk) 15:23, 21 January 2020 (UTC)
    • @Sturmvogel 66: - anything left to do here? I’d like to get the ball rolling on getting this and Württemberg added to the FT, which requires a new nomination, apparently. Parsecboy (talk) 12:51, 25 January 2020 (UTC)