Talk:Saint Lucia at the 2000 Summer Olympics

GA Review

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Reviewer: CycloneIsaac (talk · contribs) 22:20, 1 April 2017 (UTC)

Reviewing later.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 22:20, 1 April 2017 (UTC)

• You should mention how well the athletes did in the lead.

 Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 04:25, 2 April 2017 (UTC)

• Is the spelling suppose to be in American English or British English? If it's the latter, the spelling for meter is incorrect.

 Done Swapped to british spelling --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 04:36, 2 April 2017 (UTC)

• "13, September to 1, October." That's not how dates are formatted.

 Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 04:38, 2 April 2017 (UTC)

• "with Jamie Peterkin, and Sherri Henry in swimming." Remove comma.

Changed the wording so it is a moot point now  Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 04:42, 2 April 2017 (UTC)

• I'm not sure there's a need to mention the history of the country. Maybe mention the last time the country participated in the Olympics instead.

I generally do that if there hasn't been a few years of olympic history. This is only the send time Saint Lucia has been at the olympics.--Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 16:02, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

• "Saint Lucia formed its National Olympic Committee in 1987. Saint Lucia's NOC gained international recognition by the International Olympic Committee on 24, September 1993." These two sentences can be merged, and the date needs to be fixed.

 Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 16:02, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

• "Saint Lucia was represented by two male athletes and now female athlete at the 2000 Summer Olympics in athletics:" now → one

 Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 16:02, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

• "Ron Promesse competed in the men's 100 meter, failing to finish he did not place in the event." That sentence might need to be split.

 Done Changed the wording --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 16:02, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

• "sixtieth" Sixteenth.

Actually was supposed to be sixth. and fixed it  Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 16:02, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

• "in a three way tie along with Pavel Gerasimov, and Chad Harting." Remove comma.

 Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 16:04, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

• "finishing sixtieth in her heat, failing to advance to the next round." Replace comma with "and".

 Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 16:05, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

• "Saint Lucia was represented by one male athlete and one female athlete in swimming at the 2000 Summer Olympics, Jamie Peterkin and Sherri Henry. This was the first Olympic appearance for both Peterkin and Henry." Both sentences can be merged.

 Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 16:07, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

Some grammar issues that could've been fixed before nominating.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 23:16, 1 April 2017 (UTC)

@CycloneIsaac: all  Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 16:07, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

Fair enough.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 19:11, 3 April 2017 (UTC)