Talk:Sakura (Tsubasa: Reservoir Chronicle)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Johanna (talk · contribs) 19:42, 7 September 2015 (UTC)

Second on my "to review" list. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)^{talk to me!}_{see my work} 19:42, 7 September 2015 (UTC)

Thanks. I'll give my best.Tintor2 (talk) 22:39, 7 September 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Infobox and Lead

• Instead of putting her two appearances on different lines, put "Tsubasa: Reservoir Chronicle and xxxHolic character" as it is in the article Frasier Crane, Addison Montgomery, and other characters who appear in multiple series.
• Be sure the lead follows the structure of the article (i.e. earlier sections come first in the lead). If you find that that doesn't make sense, change the section layout instead.
• Are there two characters named Sayoran in two different mangas? If so, specify this.

Creation and conception

• "the characters of Osamu Tezuka" upon first reading, it appears that Osamu Tezuka is a character to those of us who don't know any better. :) I would replace it with "the characters created by Osamu Tezuka"
• Also, how are they similar to each other? Is this sourced?
• What's an OVA?
• "Makino pointed…" Do you mean "pointed out"?

Character outline

• Why exactly are the chapter titles in French?
• Just a question: why is there a big jump in references between chapters 32 and 145?
• How did Fei-Wang die exactly?
• Does the anime series make any changes to her storyline?

Reception

• It should probably be "popular among readers" not "within"
• Who was she second to in the first poll? In the second poll, what rank was she and who was she behind?
• I might place this rankings stuff at the end of the section, as this is more typical.
• "Megan Lavey initially called" Could you elaborate a bit on her opinions? It's a bit unclear what she was getting at right now.

References

• Refs 44 and 50 are dead.

@Tintor2: Nice article and nice writing! I was expecting to have a lot of comments on the plot summary, but it was quite well written! Clear this up and you'll be set to go. :) Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)^{talk to me!}_{see my work} 02:49, 10 September 2015 (UTC)

I've done some work and:

• I moved the creation section per WP:Lead.
• Is it okay to write "pointed out."? I mean it's a phrasal verb.
• I would add the original Syaoran in the lead but the character is introduced in the second half of the series.
• Found an archive ref 50. I don't know which one is ref 44 after moving the article's lead.
• The anime doesn't go anywhere and is followed by the original video animations
• The manga in both Japanese and English uses the word Chapitre.

@BenLinus1214: Tintor2 (talk) 14:59, 10 September 2015 (UTC)

@Tintor2: The old ref 44 is now ref 56 (animage). Other than that, I can definitely pass. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)^{talk to me!}_{see my work} 16:25, 10 September 2015 (UTC)

Never mind, I found an archive-url quickly. Pass. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)^{talk to me!}_{see my work} 16:28, 10 September 2015 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Thanks.Tintor2 (talk) 16:28, 10 September 2015 (UTC)