Talk:Salt Wells Pilot Plant/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 14:30, 28 October 2017 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:30, 28 October 2017 (UTC)

• External links OK, no DABs
• Image properly licensed. Can you add any more? Like, perhaps, a photo of Sage or Lauritsen?

  Y My images are all of low quality. Added a picture of Lauritsen, and of the cooling towers. Unfortunately, that's the best of the rest. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:20, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

• I really don't think that Inoykern can be called close to Pasadena as I'd bet that it's more than a 100 miles between them. Perhaps rephrasing to something along the lines of "remote area convenient to Pasadena"?

  Y I thought it would only be two hours drive. Changed to "convent to Pasadena". Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:20, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

• While Site S had sufficient capacity to make explosive components for one or two bombs, it was unlikely that it could meet the expected demand in the months to come. Somewhat redundant to the statement about Site S's capacity two paras earlier.

  Y Removed redundancy. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:20, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

• Haddock engineers Is this a company name? If so capitalize both words.

  Y Capitalised. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:20, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

• The plant was completed in January 1946, and all equipment was installed and working by May 1946. This seems to contradict the bit about casting the first explosives on 25 July '45. Clarify.

  Y Clarified. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:20, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

• direct machining of the explosive components. This involved all their surfaces. Awkward, merge the last sentence into the preceding one.

  Y Deleted the second sentence. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:20, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:32, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:21, 8 November 2017 (UTC)