Talk:Sarah Bryant (Virtua Fighter)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cukie Gherkin (talk · contribs) 00:48, 23 May 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Infobox

1. Voice talent should be mentioned in the article in some way if possible
2. Her fighting style is not mentioned in the article, and her location is only mentioned in the lead and infobox
   1. Fixed

Lead

1. Should mention Yu Suzuki's role as the creator
   1. Fixed

Conception and design

1. It says Suzuki wouldn't comment on whether she's based on a real person; is the article saying he wouldn't comment on whether she's based on a real human being? It sounds like the article is referring to Sarah Conner as a real person.
   1. Fixed
2. Consider paraphrasing the quotes a bit more (mainly the Suzuki quote)
   1. Fixed
3. "While she has had a wide variety of secondary outfits as the series progressed, her main design has been used through the series and in promotional material, only seeing minimal change through the years." - Unsourced
   1. Fixed

In other media

1. I assume the "tongue-in-cheek" mention comes from the source?
   1. Fixed to be clearer that that comes from the source.

Reception

1. I feel like "Official Sega Saturn Magazine described her as "one of the most brilliant creations in the world of video games", praising her as a "brainwashed maniac" but further emphasizing their like of her breast size, comparing them to Lara Croft's and describing Sarah's as "larger and better defined"." could be improved. For example: "Official Sega Saturn Magazine described her as "one of the most brilliant creations in the world of video games", praising the brainwashing plot and her breast size." I don't think it's really important that they're bigger than Lara's, y'know? Just means that he likes bigger tiddy.
   1. Yeah I think I was leaning too heavily into the Croft comparison due to the time it was posted. Should be a lot better now.
2. "true original; until Max Headroom becomes a polygon fighter, she'll be the oldest popular character of her type." Not sure what this means!
   1. Dug up the issue and paraphrased it better to make the comparison clearer between her and later characters.

Image

1. Image looks a bit poopy
2. Fair use rationale for the infobox image is invalid
   1. Fixed and fixed.