Talk:Satellaview/GA1
Latest comment: 4 years ago by ProtoDrake in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 11:06, 2 March 2020 (UTC)
Hopefully I'll be able to review this properly. I haven't taken on a console article GA review before. Hope to have comments or suchlike before the end of the week. --ProtoDrake (talk) 11:06, 2 March 2020 (UTC)
- Thank you ProtoDrake. I will be looking forward to your comments. Namcokid47 (Contribs) 18:08, 2 March 2020 (UTC)
Alright Namcokid47, I've got some comments for you.
- History
- "Nintendo stressed to video game publications, that much of Satellaview's content, namely broadcasts by St.GIGA themselves, were aimed primarily for adults, with video games constituting only a small portion of airtime." - I don't think we need the comma after "publications".
- Seta doesn't link to the company page. Correct to SETA Corporation.
- Since SquareSoft is a redirect, either change it to Square or link via SquareSoft.
- "Despite the company being in a slump due to the failure of the Virtual Boy and sales of Super Famicom games falling" - Perhaps rephrase to "Despite the company being in a slump due to falling Super Famicom game sales and the Virtual Boy's failure". Just a suggestion. The original just seems needlessly wordy.
- "Satellaview was never released in North America, which some publications cite due to the expensive costs of satellite broadcasting, and due to a supposed lack of appeal to American consumers." - Feels like there's a missing word in here. Maybe rewrite to "...which some publications cited as being due..." or similar. As it stands, it seems to jump from one sentence structure to another without a transition.
- "When the service had first launched, St.GIGA had a number of issues regarding broadcasting video game..." - Too many "had"s.
- Technical specifications
- MB? I know many will know that means megabit, but it should be clarified in its first instance.
- In general, there are a lot of abbreviations here that might confuse a casual reader. I know it's unnecessary to link or explain all of them, but terms such as "BS" I think warrant at least an explanation of parenthesis.
- Games and services
- Link Chunsoft (or link to Spike Chunsoft, whichever is better).
- Perhaps link Shirin the Wanderer to the Mystery Dungeon series article.
- Reception and legacy
- What is meant by "dismissed" in this instance? Dismissed as in sent away, dismissed as in shut down (not the case given info), dismissed in some other sense? It looks a strange word to use. If it's in the cited article, using quotes around it would work.
- In the legacy section, there is a [when?] tag in place for how long the Satellaview has had a cult following. Please clarify this, or rephrase it.
That's what really jumped out at me. In general, an interesting and well-crafted article. Just some elements that look they were were missed during editing passes. --ProtoDrake (talk) 19:17, 7 March 2020 (UTC)
- ProtoDrake - I believe I corrected everything you brought up. This was one of the longest articles I've done, so there were bound to be some oversights. Namcokid47 (Contribs) 19:43, 7 March 2020 (UTC)
- @Namcokid47: If you want to take it further, I think it needs a peer review or similar. Otherwise, I think this is a Pass. --ProtoDrake (talk) 19:54, 7 March 2020 (UTC)