Talk:Say Yes (Michelle Williams song)/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: CyrockingSmiler (talk contribs) 13:24, 14 August 2014 (UTC)Reply


Hi! My review for "Say Yes" will start shortly.

Unfortunately this nomination has multiple prose issues. However, the links and references are fine. I'll promote it to GA status if you fix the errors within a week. CyrockingSmiler (talk) 13:24, 14 August 2014

Fixing a few errors and then promoting it to GA status. CyrockingSmiler (talk) 11:50, 18 August 2014 (UTC)Reply

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  • Disambiguation: "Digital download" leads to a disambiguation page.
  • External: External links are ok.

References/ Further reading

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  • The links of 3 references are dodgy. Click on external links in the GA toolbox and fix them.
  • Ref #38 (Videostatic) doesn't look reliable.
  • Ref #46 (Huffington post) isn't reliable.

Prose

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Lead
  • Who are the writers of this song? - Not known. I couldn't find source about that.
  • The clip depicts the three singers at a street party, dancing and singing with a crowd along with solo appearances of each singer in a forest (insert comma here) wearing white clothes during their respective verses.   Done
  • "It was met with positive reviews from critics who hailed it as a reunion" It received generally favorable review from contemporary music critics who accredited it as a reunion   Done
Background
  • The song was written by... should be put before production. - Not known
  • "It marked the third track the trio consisting of Williams, Beyoncé and Kelly Rowland recorded together after their group Destiny's Child disbanded in 2006." The song marked the third collaboration of the trio of Destiny's Child after their disbandment in 2006.   Done
  • "Williams sent an advanced demo of the album Journey to Freedom to her former bandmates Beyoncé and Rowland which contained the song as a solo track titled When Jesus Says Yes. Upon hearing it, Rowland initiated to the trio to record the song as a collaboration between the members of Destiny's Child and do a mix on it. Both Rowland and Beyoncé recorded their respective verses in a studio afterwards." Williams sent an advanced demo of the album Journey to Freedom to her former bandmates Knowles and Rowland which contained the song as a solo track titled "When Jesus Says Yes". Later, Williams received a call from Knowles and Rowland saying, "We love 'When Jesus Says Yes'... there has to be a Destiny's Child mix of the song." Both Rowland and Knowles recorded their respective verses in a studio afterwards.   Done - I don't use Knowles as there was a consensus on Talk:Beyoncé that she should be reffered as Beyoncé.
  • "Williams further wanted to" Williams stated that she wanted to   Done
  • During an interview with Rap-Up, Knowles spoke about her decision to be a featured artist on the song, stating, "This song is so inspiring and... not enough music out there is like this and I'm proud to be a part of it."   Not done
  • "Williams revealed on her Twitter account the same day that the leaked track was an unmixed and unmastered version of Say Yes." On the same day, Williams revealed on her Twitter account that the leaked track was an unmixed and unmastered version of "Say Yes".   Done
  • "In an interview with The Hollywood Reporter, she said that she "hated" the fact that an unfinished version was released but noted that she was not angry and felt "overwhelmed" by the positive support." In an interview with The Hollywood Reporter, Williams said that she hated the fact that an unfinished version was leaked, although noted that she was not angry and felt "overwhelmed" by the positive support.   Done
  • "Prior to the song's debut, several publications reported that Beyoncé's sister, Solange Knowles, also appeared as a featured artist in "Say Yes"; however, those statements were later proved to be wrong." Prior to the song's debut, several publications reported that Knowles's sister, Solange, was also a featured artist on "Say Yes". However, the claims were proved to be wrong later.   Done
  • "June 2, 2014 and it was released to radio" remove "it"   Done
Composition
  • "Its instrumentation is provided by" Its instrumentation includes   Done
  • "According to sheet music published on Musicnotes.com by Kobalt Music Publishing America   Done
  • "Throughout the song, Williams sings the lead vocals while Beyoncé and Rowland serve as background vocalists and sing their respective solo verses respectively." Williams sings the lead vocals while Knowles and Rowland sing their solo verses and serve as background vocalists throughout the song.   Done
Critical reception
  • This section should begin with the line, the song received generally favorable reviews from critics.   Done
  • Billboard should be wikilinked.   Not done - Terms should be wikilinked only in the lead and once in the article body. In this case, Billboard is linked in the Composition section.
  • Mike Wass from Idolator   Done
  • "dance floor for the listeners" remove the   Done
  • "and further hailing it as "possibly the first twerk-inducing song of praise". Futher, he called it "possibly the first twerk-inducing song of praise"   Done
  • He concluded his review, writing,   Done
  • "Describing the song as kinetic, Marc Hogan of Spin magazine went on to described the song as not only star-studded, but damn near impossible to get out of your head, too. Rolling Stone writer Jon Blistein described the horn stabs as heavenly and went on to praised the trio's always potent harmonies" Describing the song as "kinetic", Marc Hogan of Spin magazine called it "not only star-studded, but damn near impossible to get out of your head, too." Rolling Stone writer Jon Blistein described the horn stabs as "heavenly" and praised the trio's "always potent harmonies".   Done
  • "Yahoo! Music writer Billy Johnson, Jr. found a vibrant dance energy in the song's music and further hailed its message as uplifting. Similarly, Complex writer Zach Frydenlund echoed his statements, describing the song as uplifting." Yahoo! Music writer Billy Johnson, Jr. found a "vibrant dance energy" in the song. Both Johnson, Jr. and Complex writer Zach Frydenlund described the song as "uplifting."   Not done Actually one of them says the song is uplifting while the other one says its message is uplifting.
  • "Christian Today Brownie Marie somehow agreef, praising Williams' vocal performance during the song's hook, along with the "well-controlled riffs". She concluded that Beyoncé is vocally subdued on the track, and truly lets Williams' voice receive the attention." Brownie Marie praised Williams' vocal performance during the song's hook, along with the "well-controlled riffs." She also wrote that Knowles was "vocally subdued" and let Williams' voice receive the attention.   Done
  • "Vulture columnist Lindsey Weber wrote that the song is not a total mess and that listeners might sing the praises in the song along with it." In a mixed review, Vulture columnist Lindsey Weber wrote that the song was not "a total mess" and that listeners might sing along with the track.   Done
Chart performance
  • "In the United Kingdom, "Say Yes" debuted on the UK Singles Chart at number 106 on June 14, 2014 while also debuting at number 15 on the component UK R&B Chart; both of the positions became its peak." In the United Kingdom, "Say Yes" debuted and peaked on the UK Singles Chart and UK R&B Charts at number 106 and number 15 respectively.   Done
  • "In France, the song premiered on the French Singles Chart at number 161 in the first week of charting on June 14, 2014 becoming Williams' first solo single on that chart. The following week, it fell off from the chart and it re-entered at its peak position of 90 in that country on June 28. It was last seen on the French Singles Chart the following week, at the position of 155." In France, Williams achieved her first solo single on the French Singles Chart when the track debuted at number 161 in its first week of charting. The following week, it fell off the chart, but re-entered at its peak position of 90 on June 28. The following week, it fell down to number 155 and dropped out completely next week.   Done
Music video

Background and synopsis

  • "The music video for "Say Yes" was directed by Matthew A. Cherry and was filmed on May 20, 2014." The music video for "Say Yes" was filmed on May 20, 2014 and directed by Matthew A. Cherry.   Done
  • "For the filming location, the trio appeared in a person's house in Maplewood, New Jersey and the following day many people gathered to watch them on set. Following that, the filming set was cordoned by local police." The clip was filmed in a house in Maplewood, New Jersey; where a crowd gathered to watch the trio on set. Following that, filming was cordoned by local police.   Done
  • "Several pictures of Beyoncé arriving on the set" Pictures of Knowles arriving on set   Done
  • "Williams debuted the clip for "Say Yes" on the morning TV show Good Morning America on June 18, 2014, where she called the video shoot "so much fun": "Sometimes the director or production assistants had to say like, 'OK, girls, bring it back home. Bring it back together because when we were together, we go back to how we were when we were younger, just always laughing and talking about things. It's been a great moment." Williams debuted the clip for "Say Yes" on Good Morning America on June 18, 2014. Regarding the filming of the video, she stated, "Sometimes the director or production assistants had to say like, 'OK, girls, bring it back home. Bring it back together because when we were together, we go back to how we were when we were younger, just always laughing and talking about things. It's been a great moment."   Done
  • "During it, Williams said she felt "excited that I have my sisters here with me spreading a positive message for the world" In the clip, Williams said that she felt excited that she had her "sisters" with her spreading a positive message for the world.   Done
  • "The video opens with Michelle Williams singing the opening verses and dancing to the song's beat on a street. Beyoncé, wearing an apostolic-like gown to fit the theme of the track, appears at 90 seconds into the song to deliver her verse in a forest in front of a tree hung with paper lanters; Kelly Rowland also appears soon after in the same forest wearing a white crop top, smiling. All of the three singers appear together in the video's last section when Williams, Beyoncé and Rowland sing and dance together at a street-party scence along with dancers who wave their flags and play drums. Their dancing moves were noted to be traditional African" The video opens with Williams singing the opening verses and dancing on a street. Knowles, wearing an apostolic-like gown to fit the theme of the track, appears at 90 seconds into the song to deliver her verse in a forest in front of a tree hung with paper lanterns. Rowland appears soon after in the forest wearing a white crop top. The singers appear together in the video's last section when Williams, Knowles and Rowland sing and dance together at a street-party scene along with dancers who are shown waving flags and playing drums. The choreography of the song was noted to be traditional African.   Done

Reception

  • "While reviewing the clip, Daniel Kreps from Rolling Stone said that it managed to highlight the "'feel-good' vibes" without using "heavy-handed" religious iconography. He further praised the fact that the singers made a Destiny's Child reunion."

1) Wikilink Rolling Stone.   Not done - I explained above 2) Daniel Kreps from Rolling Stone said that the clip managed to highlight the "feel-good vibes" without using "heavy-handed" religious iconography. He also praised the reunion of Destiny's Child.   Done

  • Videostatic isn't reliable per WP:RS   Done - Removed
  • "Tom Breihan of the website Stereogum said that each singer looked "seriously happy", further praising Beyoncé's style reminiscent of the Destiny's Child-era." Tom Breihan from Stereogum wrote that each singer looked "seriously happy", he also found Knowles' style to be reminiscent of the Destiny's Child-era.   Not done - There is nothing wrong with the sentence as it is now.
  • "Zakiya Yamal, a People magazine editor, found the traditional choreography and drums to be inspired by African roots. Yamal further praised the singers' synchronized "formidable moves, reminding everyone they've still got it".

1) Wikilink people mag 2)Zakiya Yamal from People magazine noted the traditional choreography and drums to be inspired by African roots as well as praised the singers' "synchronized, formidable moves, reminding everyone they've still got it".   Not done - There is nothing wrong with the sentences as they are now.

  • Huffington Post isn't reliable per WP:RS   Done - Removed
  • "Alex Rees from the magazine Cosmpolitan concluded that a reunion of the group was "always good fun". He went on to note that it was the "only occasion, ever, in which Michelle gets to dance in the center spot between Queen B and Kelly" Alex Rees from Cosmpolitan wrote that a reunion of the group was "always good fun". He also noted that the clip featured Williams dancing in the center spot between Knowles and Rowland for the first time.   Done
  • "Similarly, Mike Wass from the website Idolator who described the video as "heavenly", concluded that it was "heart-warming to see the gospel diva have her moment". Wass went on to describe the clip as a "visual extravaganza" and praise Beyoncé's look." Mike Wass from Idolator described the video as "heavenly" and wrote that it was "heart-warming" to see Williams have her moment. He also called the clip a "visual extravaganza" and praise Knowles' look.   Done
  • "Mike Ayers, a reviewer for Fuse, described the visual as "uplifting", adding that it included numerous "sun-soaked" shots of the singers. John Walker of MTV News described the "glorious", fun clip as "the Destiny's Child reunion of your dreams".

1) Wilink fuse.   Not done 2) Mike Ayers from Fuse described the clip as including numerous "sun-soaked" shots of the singers and "uplifting".   Not done - There is nothing wrong with my sentence. 3) John Walker of MTV described the clip as "the Destiny's Child reunion of your dreams".   Not done - There is nothing wrong with my sentence.

  • "Similarly, Zach Frydenlund from Complex wrote, "We sure had a great time watching and remembering our favorite Destiny's Child moments." 1)Wikilink complex.   Not done

2)Zach Frydenlund from Complex wrote that he had "a great time" watching and remembering his "favorite Destiny's Child moments."   Done

  • "Billboard's Chris Payne who described the clips as "jubilant" felt"

1) Wikilink billboard.   Not done 2) Chris Payne of Billboard described the clip as "jubilant" and felt that   Done

  • "Consequence of Sound editor Chris Coplan praised the clip's positive energy as "[b]right and shimmery" comparing it with "forget the world and just dance" clips from early '90s." Chris Coplan from Consequence of Sound praised the clip's positive energy as "bright and shimmery", comparing it with "forget the world and just dance" clips from the early '90s.   Not done - In the review, "Bright" is with a capital B and because here it is not in the beginning of the sentence, a smal b put in [] should be used to indicate that something is changed from the original text.
  • "Brett Malec from E! Online described the visual as "[i]nspirational". Hayden Manders from the website Refinery29 praised Williams' look and concluded, "the three women look like they're having a blast". Mikael Wood from Los Angeles Times found the choreography performed by the trio to be "light" and overally desrcibed the clip as "pretty festive"

1) Wikilink refinery 29 and la times   Not done 2) Brett Malec from E! Online described it as "inspirational". Hayden Manders from Refinery29 praised Williams' look and stated that "the three women look like they're having a blast". Mikael Wood from Los Angeles Times found the choreography to be "light" and desrcibed the clip as "pretty festive."   Done

Live performances
  • This section should be expanded with other performances, or deleted.   Not done That is the only sourced live performance of the song.
Charts
  • Charts are ok.
  • Credits and personnel should be added as well.   Not done - I can not find credits for the song online.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
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    B. MoS compliance:  
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:  
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:  
    C. No original research:  
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:  
    B. Focused:  
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:  
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:  
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:  
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:  

In my opinion, this article is adequate for GA classification. Well done! CyrockingSmiler (talk) 11:50, 18 August 2014 (UTC)Reply