Talk:Scherzo in F-sharp minor (Shostakovich)

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:51, 10 July 2022 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will review this short article today; it is appropriately the GAN before mine in the queue! --K. Peake 06:51, 10 July 2022 (UTC)

Thanks for your review, again! Really appreciate the comments. I have addressed them all now. Let me know if there's anything else to do. Unexpectedlydian^♯4talk^‽ 15:01, 12 July 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Link anything significant in the infobox like you have elsewhere, e.g. Dmitri Shostakovich
  •  Done
• Introduce who Dmitri Shostakovich is
  •  Done
• Pipe Petrograd Conservatory to Saint Petersburg Conservatory
  •  Done
• "It is one of" → "The composition is one of"
  •  Done
• "It was premiered in" → "The composition was premiered in"
  •  Done
• After the above sentence, add one about the themes of this composition, followed by a critical reception sentence; split into two paras if enough sentences
  •  Done
• Wikilink F-sharp minor
  •  Done

Background

• Wikilink F-sharp minor
  •  Done
• "during the autumn of early winter months" I don't think this actually makes sense
  • Should be "or", have changed.  Done
• "the composers' first year at" → "the composer's first year at"
  •  Done
• Pipe Petrograd Conservatory to Saint Petersburg Conservatory
  •  Done
• "Shostakovich was almost fifteen." → "Shostakovich was almost 15." per MOS:NUM
  • Also changed thirteen to 13.  Done
• Shouldn't you write "this generally remains" since the date has been disputed as you've cited here?
  •  Done
• Wikilink B minor
  •  Done
• "composition teacher, Maximilian Steinberg, who had taught Shostakovich" → "composition teacher Maximilian Steinberg, who had taught him"
  •  Done
• The last para can be moved to the end of the critical assessment section, which can be also a legacy one as I will later explain
  •  Done

Form

• Pipe Tchaikovsky to Pyotr Ilyich Tchaikovsky
  •  Done
• See MOS:NUM for the correct formatting of the numbers of the instruments
  •  Done
• "reminiscent of Maximillian Steinberg." → "reminiscent of Steinberg."
  •  Done
• Wikilink D major
  •  Done

Critical assessment

• Retitle to Reception and legacy
  •  Done
• Add a comma after Nikolai Malko
  •  Done
• Mention the year of Symphony No. 1
  •  Done
• Pipe ballet to Ballet (music)
  •  Done
• Remove wikilink on Tchaikovsky
  •  Done
• Pipe Delibes to Léo Delibes
  •  Done
• Remove comma before Children's Notebook
  •  Done
• "to the composer: Gillies" → "to the composer; Gillies"
  •  Done

References

Citations

• Copyvio score looks phenomenal at 5.7%!!!!
• Ref 11 does not lead to any work, so fix it
  • Link didn't work due to a typo, have fixed now.  Done

Works cited

• Pipe Grove Music Online to The New Grove Dictionary of Music and Musicians
  •  Done

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; nice job on this one! --K. Peake 08:30, 10 July 2022 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass now; I did some brief copy editing for appropriate usage of paras! --K. Peake 07:27, 14 July 2022 (UTC)