Talk:School feeding in low-income countries

Review of and suggestions for current entry

The current entry is a much needed addition to the Wikipedia community and provides a comprehensive examination of school feeding in low-income countries. It effectively delves into a very complex and pertinent worldwide issue. However, the article could be improved even further by locating the "Approaches to school feeding" section immediately after "Types of school feeding programs" rather than at the end of the article. These topics both discuss current models of school feeding and are intimately interrelated since the "types" are largely dependent on the "approaches" chosen. Thus, they should be organized in a fashion that demonstrates this relationship. Additionally, the article briefly mentions the Fill the Cup campaign in the "Involvement of the World Food Programme" without adequately illustrating how it connects with the rest of the subsection. The article would benefit from an elaboration on this particular program addressing how it works and its success. Furthermore, the "As a safety net" subsection may be better off if instead incorporated previous subsections. It currently seems to reiterate much of the same information that the other "Benefits" discuss and does not really add much to the article. For instance, it focuses on the safety net of health and nutritional benefits which were discussed earlier in the "Nutrition and food security" subsection and on the ability to keep children in school which was addressed in the "Education" subsection. Finally, the entry has some linking (many are in red indicating no linkage) and citation (they are not in compliance with Wikipedia standards and need to include more information than just the link) issues. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mwtwgt (talk • contribs) 06:08, 6 April 2013 (UTC)

Response

Thank you for your helpful comments, Mwtwgt. I have updated this article with your suggestions in mind. I moved the "Approaches" section to after the "Types" section, because I agree with the flow of the article as you mentioned. Because the "Fill the Cup" campaign is not the only or most important aspect of World Food Programme, I decided to take out that sentence altogether and instead expand on some other aspects of what exactly World Food Programme does. Additionally, I removed the section "As a safety net," because I also agreed that that information was mostly redundant. Finally, I fixed the red links and added more information to the references. Thanks for your help! Laurenpedia (talk) 14:54, 8 April 2013 (UTC)

Additional review

Your use of links is very useful, though there are a few that are marked in red, meaning you should take a look at them and find the correct page to link your article to. I would recommend spreading out your images across the page in order to break up the words a little more. Perhaps finding some graphs or charts could add a little more dimension to your page. There is a small typo in the "Types of school feeding programs" section, I believe. I think that you wanted to say "on-site means" as opposed to "on-school meals" in the first line. The section named "As a safety net" is kind of confusing. A reader might not automatically know what that section is about upon reading the title in the outline. Once they get to the section, it covers a lot of the same things that previous sections cover so it might be more advantageous to just add the information into the previous sections somehow. Including more information about the World Food Programme would be great. Learning about more specific programs would be helpful in understanding school feeding better.Mariapickett (talk) 17:31, 6 April 2013 (UTC)

Response

Thank you for your comments, Mariapickett. I altered my article in response to your helpful suggestions, as you can see with the fixed links and re-arranged images. Additionally, I removed the section "As a safety net" because I realized it is very redundant and does not positively impact my article. Finally, I also added additional information about World Food Programme. I am still looking for more pictures or graphs, but copyright laws make it difficult to use certain documents. Laurenpedia (talk) 14:58, 8 April 2013 (UTC)

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