Talk:Scorpion pose

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Chiswick Chap in topic GA Review

GA Review

edit
GA toolbox
Reviewing
This review is transcluded from Talk:Scorpion pose/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Augustios Paleo (talk · contribs) 20:12, 2 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Many thanks. I'm out of office so may respond slowly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:12, 3 August 2023 (UTC)Reply


  • I will do this review today or tomorrow.

Review

edit
  • Earwig detected low percentages of copying, so this passes that.
    • Noted.
  • " yoga as exercise" should it be "as an" exercise?
    • It's correct as it is, exercise as a thing of quantity.
  • Is there any more info on the origin? If not, this section should be good.
    • That's about it on this aspect.
  • hyphen between "20th" and "century"
    • Added.
  • " B. K. S. Iyengar's 1966 Light on Yoga grades it as level 32 out of 60." on what scale? And say something like "Yoga specialist B. K. S...."
    • The scale is the "out of 60", which is Iyengar's own. Added.
  • "head is lifted from the ground so the body is supported only by the forearms" remove "from the ground"
    • Done.
  • the word "variant" is repetitive, change to "form", "variety", etc.
    • Would much prefer not to do that, as all the Yoga articles use this word with this meaning.
  • "props and are able to land safely if they fall; this requires the ability to perform backarches such as Urdhva " change "are able to" to "can", and "backarches" is two words.
    • Reworded. It's one word as a noun.
  • "with the back less extremely arched." backless is one word
    • No, that would be a backless dress, this means that "less" qualifies "extremely".
  • In the "Beginner to intermediate" section, combine sentences into paragraphs for each form. The current spacing is unnecessary
    • Done.
  • "but with only the elbows on the ground, the hands cradling the face, making it a difficult balance" change to "and the hands"
    • No, as stated the hands cradle the face, which is not on the ground.
  • "In 2022, the Indian yoga teacher Yash Moradiya held the pose for 29 minutes and 4 seconds, as measured by Guinness World Records in Dubai.[22]" link Dubai and say "Dubai, UAE" or "Dubai, United Arab Emirates
    • Added.
  • Great job!
    • Many thanks!