Talk:Selena Etc./GA1

The trading link redirects to Walmart....Minor vandalism pls edit it--108.21.52.62 (talk) 01:49, 4 September 2011 (UTC)

GA Review

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Reviewer: BelovedFreak 20:14, 6 July 2010 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   Some minor manual of style issues. Article should be in sections with a lead section (articles should have enough material to enable separation into sections). Needs a copyedit.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   I can't believe that this article is a broad overview of this business. If it is, there may be notability issues.

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   A little bit of non-neutral language

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

   No problems here.

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   No images used. Any free images available would enhance the article. A company logo, although unfree, could be used under fair use in an article like this. It would need an appropriate fair use rationale.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Unfortunately, this article is not close to being a good article. Please review the GA criteria for more information. The first thing that strike me is that it's far too short. Some good articles are quite short, but this is essentially one paragraph and although I'm not familiar with the the company, I sincerely doubt that this article currently covers the main points.

• Citations should come after punctuation, rather than before. Like this: After Selena's death, Chris Perez, the husband of Selena, began taking over the business. rather than like this: After Selena's death, Chris Perez, the husband of Selena, began taking over the business.
• Citations to the same source can be combined (see here)
• The references here are bare URLs with no extra information. To comply with the verifiability policy, as much information as possible should be included. To help you to lay out references, you can use citation templates such as {{cite web}}. The fields give you an idea of what to include, but you should include the name of the source (eg. the name of a website or newspaper), the title, the date of publication if available, author if available, the date you accessed it if it's a website.
• "Latin Superstar, Selena" - superstar shouldn't have a capital letter, but it's best not to describe her as a superstar as it's not very neutral. I also wouldn't describe her as "Latin" for two reasons. Firstly, to much of the world, Latin has to do with ancient Rome. Secondly, it's not necessary to mention her ethnicity (it's ok in the article about her, but is it necessary here?) If her nationality is Mexican-American, then say that, but if her nationality is just American, leave it at that. I would change that description to something like American singer Selena
• Watch out for overlinking. For example, you don't need to link to headquarters. Only link to articles that will enhance a reader's understanding of this (by improving context) or that they are unlikely to be familiar with.
• "Selena's untimely death" - try to avoid describing someone's death as "untimely". While not as bad as "tragic", it's not really encyclopedic in tone. She died very young, and I'm sure it was untimely to her loved ones and fans (not to mention her) but readers can judge that for themselves.
• Some of the prose is a little awkward. For example, "After Selena's death, Chris Perez, the husband of Selena, began taking over the business" could be improved: After Selena's death her husband, Chris Perez, took over the business
• "July of 2009" should just be July 2009 (see MOS:DATE for more on dates.)
• I'm not sure if it's a typo, or a specifically American thing, but I don't know what "For Sale sigh" means. The whole sentence is grammatically incorrect
• "$91,454 US Dollars" - here you have a dollar sign, followed by "US dollars"; only the dollar sign is necessary. (link it to US dollars though, not dollar sign)
• "scoped up my admirers of the singer."?

When you've addressed these issues, I'd strongly suggest listing the article at peer review for further advice before renominating as a good article. Let me know if you have any questions.--BelovedFreak 20:14, 6 July 2010 (UTC)