Talk:Shanna Moakler/GA1

GA Review

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Hello. I will be doing the GA review for this article. Here are some suggestions for improvement:

• The lead doesn't comply with WP:LEAD. It should be at 2 or 3 paragraphs summarizing the main points of the article. No new information should be in the lead (ex: vegetarianism). Also, since the article focuses so much on her relationships, more of that should also be in the lead.
• Image:Shanna Moakler and Dick Clark at Miss Teen USA.jpg and Image:Screenshot of Shanna Moakler on Pacific Blue.jpg need fair use rationales, or they will be tagged for deletion.
• Months and years should not be separated by the word "of". Ex: September of 2000
• The jet crash has very little to do with Moakler herself. I'd delete most of it except maybe a brief description and the info about her almost being on the plane. I'd also put it in the Reconciliation section whether than a separate section.
• The following sources need to be replaced by more reliable sources: TMZ, Celebrity Wonder, IMDB, Celebspin, Perez Hilton, Planet Gossip, Reality TV World...they can stay if you can prove their fact checking.
• These refs are dead: 13
• These refs need to be formatted: 46 and 47
• When was she in the musical group? What became of it?

That's it for now. I'll let you work on these before adding anything new. I'll put the article on hold for seven days to allow for improvements. Nikki311 18:15, 25 October 2008 (UTC)

Okay. Per the note on my talk page, this nomination has been withdrawn. Nikki311 22:31, 6 November 2008 (UTC)