Talk:Shazam! (film)/GA1
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Reviewer: Gerald Waldo Luis (talk · contribs) 06:40, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
I'll be reviewing this article. GOOD ARTICLE TEST 1. GeraldWL 06:40, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
Lead
edit- "The plot follows teenager Billy Batson (Angel) as he is chosen by the ancient wizard Shazam (Hounsou) to be his new champion"-- what do you mean by "his next champion"? GeraldWL 06:50, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
Done, changed word to current Chompy Ace 23:18, 21 December 2020 (UTC)- Chompy Ace, I'm referring to the word "champion." What does it mean by that? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Done, added defintion based on Plot section Chompy Ace 08:22, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Chompy Ace, thanks for that! Just reminds me that I only understand 60% of the film. GeraldWL 08:23, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Done, added defintion based on Plot section Chompy Ace 08:22, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "Development of a live-action Shazam! film"-- suggest linking live action. GeraldWL 06:50, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
- "Principal photography began in Toronto, Ontario, Canada"-- suggest trimming down to "Principal photography began in Toronto, Canada". GeraldWL 06:50, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
- Line has already been changed to "Principal photography began in Toronto".
- "He would later be cast in January 2017 to lead a solo Black Adam development project." The sentence is also featured at the Production section with the sentence there being cited, so a citation in the lead is not needed. GeraldWL 06:50, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
- "The film received positive reviews from critics, with praise for Sandberg's direction and the performances of Levi, Grazer, and Angel, as well as its generally light tone and sense of fun." Suggest moving the citation to the Reception section and take info from here if haven't, that way we don't need a citation in the lead. GeraldWL 06:50, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
Cast
edit- "Director David F. Sandberg makes cameo appearances"-- suggest linking cameo appearance, thus delinking "appearance" in the next paragraph's "Easter egg appearance." GeraldWL 09:48, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
- " Johnson will portray the titular role in Black Adam." Citation? GeraldWL 09:48, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
- "Their voices were collectively provided by actors Steve Blum, Darin De Paul, and Fred Tatasciore. In an Easter egg appearance, Andi Osho reprises her role as social worker Emma Glover from Sandberg's debut film Lights Out." Supported by three citations: two are reliable, whilst one is from... a Reddit thread? Suggest relocating the citation(s), as well as replacing the Reddit cite with another one if that's needed, or just remove it entirely. GeraldWL 09:48, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
Development and pre-production
edit- "New Line Cinema began development of a Shazam! live-action feature film"-- link live action? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "was attached as director and Dwayne Johnson was in talks to appear as the film's villain, Black Adam." Supported by two citations. Mind relocating? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Done see Special:Diff/995678398 for reasoning Chompy Ace 08:30, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "New Line Cinema was absorbed into Warner Bros. during the course of development." Citation? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Done, removed sentence Chompy Ace 08:27, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "Following the success of Warner's Batman film The Dark Knight and the commercial failure of its lighter, family-friendly Speed Racer, both during the summer of 2008, August departed from the project, citing pressure from the studio to make the screenplay darker and more serious." Supported by whopping three cites. Relocate? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "In August 2010, the studio considered canceling the theatrical movie"-- the English Wikipedia prefers "film", "movie" is used primarily on the Simple English Wikipedia. GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "...in favor of a live-action series for prime time network television"-- link prime time? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "While development on the Shazam! film was in limbo"-- mind linking the "limbo" it's referring to, or use a more non-jargony term? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Done, now links to Development limbo Chompy Ace 08:46, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "Due to ongoing trademark conflicts with Marvel Comics"-- ongoing as of now? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Done removed ongoing word Chompy Ace 08:42, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "In April 2014, Warner Bros. revealed their upcoming slate of films based on DC Comics properties. A Justice League film was set to be released in 2017, alongside adaptations of Shazam!, Fables, and 100 Bullets. The Shazam! film was tentatively set for release in July 2016." Supported by three citations. Mind relocating? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Done, -1 reference as a blog, reworded, and I added Metal Men in source Chompy Ace 12:13, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "Warner Bros. stated that the film would be based on the 2012-2013 Shazam! backup feature from the Justice League comic book, by writer Geoff Johns and artist Gary Frank, which told a modernized version of Shazam's origin." Supported by two citations. Mind relocating? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
Casting
edit- "By September 2014, Dwayne Johnson was set to portray Black Adam in the film, but by July 2017, he had left the project to pursue a Black Adam solo film." No need to repeat this repeated info. GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "Sandberg had stated in an interview that instead of de-aging an actor using special effects or CGI"-- link Computer-generated imagery? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Done, also CGI replaced with Computer-generated imagery at first mention Chompy Ace 08:40, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "Later that month, Jovan Armand, Ian Chen, Faithe Herman, and Cooper Andrews were cast as Pedro Peña, Eugene Choi, and Darla Dudley, with Andrews portraying Victor Vazquez, one of Billy Batson's foster parents." Supported by three citations. Mind relocating? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "By July, Djimon Hounsou had replaced Jones as the wizard Shazam"-- remove "the wizard" due to repetitiveness. GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "Principal photography for Shazam! began in Toronto and Hamilton, in Ontario, Canada on January 29, 2018, under the working title Franklin,"-- supported by three citations. Mind relocating? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "Reshoots and additional photography took place in Toronto between November and December 2018." Supported by two citations. Mind relocating? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "Shazam! had a production budget of $90–100 million (and about $102 million once post-production was complete), making it the least expensive DCEU film to-date." Supported by four citations. Mind relocating? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "In April 2018, a first look at Shazam! was shown at the CinemaCon convention in Las Vegas, Nevada, as director David F. Sandberg introduced behind-the-scene footage." Supported by two citations. Mind relocating? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "During an interview with Film Riot Podcast in June 2018"-- suggest changing "Film Riot Podcast" with "podcast Film Riot", with "podcast" placed out of the pipe link. GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "A new trailer was released on March 4, and a three-minute sneak peek was included with the digital home media of Aquaman. At the STP 500 on March 24, 2019, Shazam! was the primary sponsor of Aric Almirola and the #10 Ford Mustang in the Monster Energy NASCAR Cup Series. Almirola would go on to finish 9th after starting 2nd." Supported by two citations. Mind relocating? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Done, the sentence "Almirola would go on to finish 9th after starting 2nd." was removed as possible trivia Chompy Ace 11:56, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
Box office
edit- "In the United States and Canada, Shazam! was released alongside The Best of Enemies and Pet Sematary, and was projected to gross $40–50 million from 4,260 theaters in its opening weekend." Supported by two citations. Mind relocating? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
Done, removed source in one sentence Chompy Ace 11:59, 22 December 2020 (UTC)- Chompy Ace, mind that my concerns on multi citations are only valid if it is indeed valid. If it is required for that one sentence to be supported by multiple cites, and if there's no way to relocate, then please object the concern. Just saying. GeraldWL 12:06, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Done, with $40-50 million citation bundle Chompy Ace 12:34, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Chompy Ace, mind that my concerns on multi citations are only valid if it is indeed valid. If it is required for that one sentence to be supported by multiple cites, and if there's no way to relocate, then please object the concern. Just saying. GeraldWL 12:06, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "...the film grossed $3.3 million from Fandango advance screenings"-- link Fandango Media? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- "In its second weekend the film made $25.1 million, retaining the top spot, before being dethroned by newcomer The Curse of La Llorona in its third weekend." Supported by two citations. Mind relocating? GeraldWL 08:12, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Done Chompy Ace 10:54, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Chompy Ace, thanks for addressing all issues. I'll do a reference layout check, and after that will make this article Passed for the GA criteria. GeraldWL 13:50, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
- Done Chompy Ace 10:54, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
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