Talk:She's a Mess/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 22:12, 1 June 2012 (UTC) Hey! I'm back from my vacation. I'll be reviewing again. And i'll start wtih this... --Hahc21 ^{[TALK][CONTRIBS]} 22:12, 1 June 2012 (UTC)

Review

#	Section	Statement	Issue(s)
1	Lead	"She's a Mess" garnered generally mixed reviews from music critics; some criticized the lack of identity, however others named it one of the album's best tracks."	Maybe we can enhance the prose: "She's a Mess" garnered generally mixed reviews from music critics, who commented about the "lack of identity" of the song, while others named it one of the album's best tracks." I think the "lack of identity" should be quoted, as it's likely to be challenged. Also, this info doesn't appear on the article body.
2	Writing and recording	"All music and instruments were played by Mars and Levine."	I don't know yet exactly what, but something seems out of place... Iit may be a little confusing.

Nothing else to be noted here. Also, i felt weird when reading the article and without the Background section. of course, this is just a comment about past reviews XD --Hahc21 ^{[TALK][CONTRIBS]} 22:35, 1 June 2012 (UTC)

I can't really source the "lack of identity" since it's a conclusion. Rewritten last sentence of the lead. Till I Go Home ^{talk edits} 01:21, 2 June 2012 (UTC)

but a conclusion of yours? Remember avoiding OR (Just commenting)... I think it is better now. --Hahc21 ^{[TALK][CONTRIBS]} 01:43, 2 June 2012 (UTC)

"wouldn't have sounded much different coming from any other girl band", "just about good enough to forget the absurdity of it being a Sugababes track". Till I Go Home ^{talk edits} 01:57, 2 June 2012 (UTC)

I changed it again, except this time with "originality". Till I Go Home ^{talk edits} 02:00, 2 June 2012 (UTC)

Ok, now there won't be doubts about if its OR or not. Now it is clearer :) --Hahc21 ^{[TALK][CONTRIBS]} 02:10, 2 June 2012 (UTC)

Verdict

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Final comment: I'm a little concerned about the WP:NSONGS guideline since it hasn't charted, but it's my personal opinion and then kind of irrelevant here. The article meets all the criteria, and as a result, it is promoted to GA status. Regards. --Hahc21 ^{[TALK][CONTRIBS]} 16:02, 2 June 2012 (UTC)

Thanks. Till I Go Home ^{talk edits} 16:16, 2 June 2012 (UTC)

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