Talk:Shea Theodore/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:53, 2 May 2020 (UTC)

Shall be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 18:53, 2 May 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• Perhaps include his achievements in international play in the lead?  Done

Personal life

• The Province mentions that Theodore's mother works at a bank. I think it would benefit the article if this fact was mentioned  Done

Youth

• "option out of the Burnaby Winter Club." - opting  Done
• "He played Minor hockey" - the word highlighted in bold doesn't need to be capitalized  Done
• Also, wikilink the above term for non-Ice hockey readers  Done
• "he was measured at 5’10 and 142-pounds." - the convert templates would be helpful to the two figures indicated in bold  Done
• "By the time he graduated from Minor hockey" - same issue as the second point I have raised in this section  Done
• Wikilink 2011 Canada Winter Games since there is an article on the subject  Done
• How about wikilinking the terms point and goal to the relevant articles for those unfamiliar with ice hockey terminology?  Done
• "Theodore was ranked 17th amongst American skated" - skaters  Done
• Wikilink 2013–14 season to 2013–14 WHL season  Done
• Wikilink scout to Scout (sport) and training camp to its respective article  Done
• Wikilink Norfolk Admirals to Norfolk Admirals (AHL) on its first mention and junior hockey to Junior ice hockey  Done
• Wikilink the term captain to Captain (ice hockey)  Done
• "He joined the Ducks American Hockey League (AHL) affiliate," - just the acronyms AHL will suffice since the full name is mentioned in previous paragraph of the article  Done

Professional

• "In the 1–0 win which ended the Flames' home win streak," - repetition of the word "win"  Done
• "He would later recorded his first career NHL goal " - the text in bold can be changed to would later record or later recorded Done
• "an amount he estimated suppressed 15." - 15 times.  Done
• "and was praised for his skating ability." - praised by whom?  Done
• "due to the contract dispute." - what contract dispute? Please elaborate further where possible since this is the first time the contract dispute is mentioned in the article  Done
• "was invited to drop the Ceremonial first puck" - no need to captalize the word highlighted in bold  Done
• "during the Golden Knights Hockey Fights Cancer game on November 22, 2019." - Langley Advance Times says the game happened on November 21 not November 22  Done

International play

• 2012–13 season is overlinked  Done
• Wikilink Russians to Russia men's national junior ice hockey team  Done
• Wikilink the second mention of Team Canada to Canada men's national junior ice hockey team  Done
• "While undergoing preparations to compete," - to compete in the tournament,  Done
• "after he failing a drug test" - either after failing or he failed please  Done
• How about wikilinking hCG hormone to the appropriate article for those unfamiliar with it  Done
• I believe it would help to wikilink the term blueline to the relevant article  Done

References

• References 10, 25 and 34 are missing the authors of the respective articles  Done

Does #34 have an author?

If referring to the former Last Word of Sports reference that was deleted than yes 12:33, 3 May 2020 (UTC)

• Reference 17 should include .com in the work field to maintain consistency with other sources  Done
• Reference 20 is missing Associated Press as the agency  Done
• Reference 23 is missing the author and The Canadian Press as the agency  Done
• Reference 24 is missing the date it was accessed  Done
• Reference 26 should not be in all capital letters per MOS:ALLCAPS  Done
• References 19 & 39 is missing The Canadian Press in the agency field  Done
• What makes Reference 34 reliable?  Removed

Am going to put the review on hold to allow the nominator to respond/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 07:39, 3 May 2020 (UTC)

MWright96, Thanks for the speedy review. I believe I have made all the necessary changes. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 10:51, 3 May 2020 (UTC)

• @HickoryOughtShirt?4: Now promoting to GA class. I have made one minor change to the article. MWright96 (talk) 12:33, 3 May 2020 (UTC)