Talk:Shelby Gem Factory/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Doug Coldwell in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 21:18, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
Review in progress
This article is being put on a 7-day hold.
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Copy changes
edit- There are numerous locations in the article that need tense changing to reflect the 2019 closure (e.g. is → was). This is probably the single largest content issue on the page.
History
edit- Jo Kelly should be Kelley.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:18, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- Second paragraph could stand to be less choppy.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:08, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
Factory
edit- Remove the emdash in the second sentence.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:15, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- Comma after "theater"
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:15, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- Set off "by then" in commas and then make "off limits" hyphenated
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:15, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
Gem manufacturing
edit- Consider combining the second and third sentences.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:20, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
Other items
edit- I feel like there is something missing. Why did the factory close? How did the business evolve over the years? I'd love to know that but don't get that from this.
- Done
- Watch tone in a few places which feels a touch promotional or overly positive.
- Done
- Earwig mostly catches quotes in the article.
- Done
- Practically every reference is archived.
- Done
- Lots of great photos (some taken by Kelley in 2003!) which are all suitable for use. Some images do need alt tags.
- Done
Comments
edit- @Sammi Brie: Thanks for review. I'll start working on the issues.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:21, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
- @Sammi Brie: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:43, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- @Doug Coldwell: Almost there (made a few minor cleanup changes). This sentence I'd excise for tone:
The factory's FAQ said "our rubies and sapphires are really ruby and sapphire!"
Ping me when that is removed and I think this can be promoted. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 22:28, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- @Sammi Brie: = Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:35, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- @Doug Coldwell: Almost there (made a few minor cleanup changes). This sentence I'd excise for tone: